Desperate Dove

This poem is based on the real life event happened was the black day for that the peace messangers who lost their childs and mad 'em desperate.

There is the couple of Dove;
Who fallen with each other deep in the love.

The love became strong and settled in a nest;
to make their home they've tried their best.

The nest became home and they've blessed with two eggs;
They have struggles a lot and the chicks having tiny legs.

The legs she used sometimes to protect her childs;
Sometimes to find the food for their lovely childs;

Those lovely childs just love their mother;
They just want the shelter of their mother;
The mother looks suspiciously with every other.

Other looks wild and predator for their children;
She never left her childs and protect with the concern.

The concern of their child is the only mission;
These chicks will grow and fly high in the sky was only their vision.

The vision was divine & their eyes were always shine;
They have the stronger feelings these chicks are own mine.

Mine intentions only to see them grow day by day;
No one knows that Sunday was their last day.

The day that makes the doves on the black;
the day that leaves those doves on the ache.

The ache of the heart, the ache of the brain the ache of to live without the childrens of their own;
The mother goes around to find the food for new born.

Born of death through the cat;
She attacks on both and terrible ate.

She ate those chicks and leaves the nest alone;
The mother dove comes and shocked and started to moan.

Moaning so loud, crying so loud;
where are my childrens for whom i have too much proud;
whom do i love so infinite and
keep them enshroud;
it seems like she being facing a giant thunder cloud.

The cloud of happiness that she had in her dreams;
comes with an end of saddest screams.

The scream she continued for the minute for the day;
Hope in her eyes that she will find her chicks one day.

The day that never comes ;
Those lives will never returns.

She return again and again to that nest;
to see those her lives to live @ their best.

But the reality becomes dreams;
and she is just screams....

Author's Note

just write to releif from pain

Reviews

[Davidgeo]

This is riddled with grammatical errors so prevalent I couldn't even finish it. I wanted to like it but you botched the wording so badly I had to cringe and look away. It's not "thinking different", it's just bad and lazy writing. Learn how to write the language if you want to be taken more seriously.

[anonymousprankt]

Thanks for correction Sir. But in fact i am not here to show how perfect i am in grammar. You can not judge me neither i can. I have wrote it for me if dont you like then i am not forcing you, to read it. Before appointing your pointer, you should see yourself!

[Davidgeo]

Fair enough. I still objectively stand by every single word of my aforementioned review. It would serve you better to do your best not to get mad and honestly consider what I said. Perhaps I lack tact... but what I said was not just bullshit. Good luck in your future writing projects.

[anonymousprankt]

Again thanks a lot for the feedback and judge; but still what left me dumb is what; you did not read Author's Note for "Desperate Dove" - I had just wrote to relief myself from pain that i cant forget even today....

[Davidgeo]

I read your author's note. Stop trying to reach for reasons to discredit my initial review. It makes you seem foolish.

[anonymousprankt]

huh! Mr. David it seems; you gonna be suffering from disease of hypo-egoistic; GOD BLESS YOU!

[Davidgeo]

I'm an egotist because I critiqued you in a way you don't agree with? Ugh... project much?

[Davidgeo]

Use logic... ad hominin and calls to religious authority are the weakest of arguments. Good luck with that.