Life according to me

I'm not a freaking bad person

I may be rude to you

I may try to teach you a lesson

But I never did anything like that

I may pretend to be strong

But I'm fragile

I did many things wrong

I didn't lose the smile,

Though I broke many times

I don't have to trust people easily,
I still forget that
Some people hurt me
And I tried to hurt them recently

But now I realize that,that was stupid of me 

I was a being a fool

Not to see the people who were really there for me

When I thought I was being cool

I have now realized that,

It sucks that sometimes in life

You get turned down

It feels that you have been stabbed by a knife

And you want to leave the town

But then thats how life is

There will be many obstacles

You have to love it the way it is

Author's Note

please tell me how is it...i want to know how my poems are!! :)

Reviews

[consistentwritin]

Awesome! Really raw!

You could try to put more rhymes in there. Like what you have:

"I was a being a fool
Not to see the people who were really there for me
When i thought i was being cool"

Not too much, though, so you don't lose the rawness.

Also, if you'd change the place of a few lines, you'd get a more complex meaning.

You have:
"I still forget for a while
That I don't have to trust people easily
Some people hate me
And i tried to hurt them recently"

What if:
"I don't have to trust people easily
I still forget that
Some people hurt me
And i tried to hurt them recently"

[anonymous101]

thnxx a lot!! ^_^...i will change the lines!! u really helped me..:)

[Craba]

very emotional piece, well expressed

[anonymous101]

thank you

[Sir Joe]

NIce! At first I thought the ending would be something negative.
I love the optimism in the end. It overpowered all the negativity in the poem. (=

[anonymous101]

Tnq..:)

[Sir Joe]

u'r welcome,,,how bout making a review on my poems? =)

[Legolas]

This is really well written! I can clearly see how the characters life is. Perhaps it's you. If it is, Im sorry. You are a great poet:) Just one common mistake you might want to fix is making all the i's capitalized:)

[anonymous101]

ty ty...C: and i write about my feelings only...:) and i will make sure i don't repeat this mistake!!

[Legolas]

Yay! Im glad i can help:)