new heart

I remember the days when we'd sit together.
I remember how we spoke to each other when we thought it was forever.
See my heart was in a separate case.
Beating close to your chest cause that's where it found its place.
A hole in my chest was left an empty space.
You could never remember the taste,
My lips left,
So i felt that...
If our lips touched enough times you'd never regret.
Had i ever misunderstood then,
My bad.
I wanted to be all you'd need.
Sad that we could never 'be'.
For months i hoped you and i would change to 'we'.
I never saw it declining into 'me'.
But now i see.
The lord answered my plea.
The cavalry in my war with loneliness.
He fashioned a new heart for me out of interest.
And decided to show more love for me without protest.
So i confess.
I'm stuck on his arm like a bride in the holy spirit wedding dress.
Ready to be handed over to Jesus Christ my goodness.
My new heart sings happiness.
Cause i don't have to guess.
Ama wait for his wedding gift with unrivaled unrest.
Cause he never fails to amaze and keep others blessed.

Author's Note

Constructive critism on the content would be appreciated.

Reviews

[Serenity Lynn]

Capitalization is needed. But with that said, this is a very very good piece. I love everything about it.

[Ricky Campbell]

Sad that we could never 'be'.
For months i hoped you and i would change to 'we'.
I never saw it declining into 'me'.
WOW, those lines are GREAT! I love that, and grammar could use a little work, but other than that enjambment is good, and this is a great piece!

[nenakris]

Thank you, I can only learn from critique