Nature's Harmony

My first ever Tanka! 2pts.

Trees sigh in the wind

Whisper quietly their song

Roots digging in deep

Entwined in the tightest knots

In a perfect harmony.

Trees take their last breath

Singing last words of their song

Roots become unearthed

Knots begin to unravel

Machines tear through unity

Author's Note

Any at all! FRIENDLY criticism though!

Reviews

[Desert Dreamer]

We should all appreciate the gifts of the trees and listen to their song. I feel sad to see them destroyed, especially the ancient ones. The is a well written poem, I like the way you have seperated the two images, one of beauty and one of destruction of that beauty.

[Moth Phoenix]

Wow! For a 12 year old that was awesome I must say! Two very short verses but it means a whole lot. The last verse speaks and says yeah that people are tearing down a lot of trees and we need trees!!
Anywhooozer great write I must say!!! (:
~Karina

[lolly<3]

This is great.. i can picture it all as the poem unfolds and i love the turn of events at the end ^^ let's hope that these forests are preserved for the future!~

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I like the fact that these two have conhesion. You have done a excellent job here..well done and I think you should give some more time to this form..

[G. Marie"floating on an..]

this was very nice and i think the phrase save a tree applies here. we do need to preserve our forests. nice write I enjoyed it and loved your choice of words here. this is amazing for your young age. keep writing you may be famous before you are of age