Just One More Step

just a little poem that was inspired by a story of hope.

I see you sitting there,

Under your favorite tree.

I hope and hope with all my heart,

That you still remember me.

I left you many years ago

But you weren't supposed to know,

That I was always here for you 

I just never said "Hello"

I heard you crying every night,

A sound that broke my heart.

You should've known that I loved you,

That it would've hurt too much to part.

I was the sunshine that danced with you,

The footsteps in the dew.

I was the wind that guided you,

That helped you to break through-

That wall you said you never could,

But you did in the end.

I was always in the shadows,

Always just around the bend.

If you'd just taken one little step away,

From the comfort zone you're too used to

You would've known that I was there,

Always there, for YOU.

Instead you stayed where you thought you belonged,

Filled with endless sorrow,

When all along you could've controlled 

The way you saw Tomorrow.

Author's Note

any views on the deeper meaning? did you like it at all??

Reviews

[Paddy]

THis is my favorite piece of writing from you! Its really meaning full and full of thoughts and wonders. This really touched my heart the use of vocabulary made this an astonishingly beautiful piece! Oh and like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it like it ....LOVE IT !!! Keep up the good work

[Love Is Dead]

What an awesome write! i loved it. keep up the good work!

[Lady Celery]

I liked this poem :) It was well-written, down-to-Earth, and what I like to see in poetry. I didn't see any grammatical errors, which makes me happy.
I don't think you should change anything!

[Nish Nish the Fish]

this is brilliant! the beauty and depth shines through the simplicity of the piece.
are you an emerging poet? if yes..you've got a gift! if no..your talent is surely shown in this piece. as for the deeper meaning..i see it as, someone very close to you is sucked up in a sort of "clique" that is changing who they are for the worst, and you're the true friend, though, they don't realize. I'm afraid this happens too often, especially in middle school (your bio on ur profile said you were 12..). I would advise you to stick to the level headed ones, the ones that are good influences and will support you in excelling, instead of discouraging you to do the right things. and trust me...right and wrong are different from what "the popular girls" portray it as in middle school..forgive me if im completely off on the meaning of this poem! hah..
anyway..very well written, i can see your vast potential hiding behind the lines of your work, just urging to get out. i say, let them out. expand your horizons and make your goal to become as knowledgeable as possible. that way, you'll have covered all your bases. well done! please, continue to share with me your blooming talent!

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

lovely flow straight from the soul/heart~

[x]

This write is unbelievable!!!
Hmmm, lost for words here. Floored by the sentiment of this poem!
I can only gather together the words amazing and brilliant... to give to you. beyond that....I must be still a while to catch my breath...

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"I was the sunshine that danced with you,
The footsteps in the dew.
I was the wind that guided you,
That helped you to break through-"

{beautiful sentimentality in this piece--wonderful poem!!!}
{I love it}

james:-)

[Leanne Conway]

Wow, This is so beautiful, I loved it. This written beautifully. =) Nice job.