Self Liberation

       I climb

         through

  the layers

     of illusioned

        clarity

to open

   the skylight

       and let

         the smoke

            out.

Reviews

[mick weller]

This is very confident!
I'm trying to work out if the stairs rising to the left has any significance...
I feel as though I'm descending here...
you know I think this would work well as an upside down piece:
....
--------the layers
----through
I climb

see where I'm coming from?
nice to see graphics and words working together here,
thank you!
doh - the spaces be gone - I'll add dashes...

[Pink Poison]

Ooooh, I like this! It is short and simple but very descriptive. I like the way you use the analogy of letting the smoke out through the skylight to describe getting rid of toxicity. My favorite is this:

I climb
through
the layers
of illusioned
clarity

It is an especially nice touch that you shaped it like a staircase. Well done...eh, it won't keep my formatting like yours, but what the heck!

[An owl on the moon]

Your work unveils the false notions we are often deceived by and our ability to rise above this and free ourselves. Powerful purpose and message!

Craig

[robin]

There's no doubt
remaining when
we take a second
look and then
again and
mange the
cobwebs
far preceding
our every step,

This is still echoing in me
Across every Void,
Robin

[Jenny Davis]

Wow! This is truly spectacular...I think true poetry speaks in very few lines and THIS definitely hits the mark...very nicely done :)

[Blackbirdsong]

I love the wonderful simplicity of this piece and how the words trail down the page which adds to the sense of the smoking flowing out of the metaphorical window.

[The realest]

Yeah sometimes it only takes a few lines to really have an impact great write and allthough short seemed very well thought out good job indeed

[Lalli]

this poem is very powerful, short with a strong punch!! through illusioned clarity is a genius line right there. seriously this poem is thought proviking, truth, and polished finely

much love n respect

-Lalli

[[untitled]]

Well shaped and efficiently written, making it a wonderful write.

[Brett Campaigne]

you bind the visceral physical act to the title, which is a very meaningful abstraction, the result is something fundamental. You've captured in simple form, what it means to have power in poetry. The play between title and physic of the content or 'narrative' is key here.

[Bluedaizy]

Damn! Who knew so few words could speak volumes? Most excellent!