White

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"The universe is made of tiny stories

Little jagged edges

sewn together with stardust."

"You're one of these shards

And did you know

That the universe is beautiful?"

You look down

As I say this

It seems there are tears 

in your eyes

I wonder what put them there

Was it the poetry

Or that I found out

About your secret

I grab your hand

and turn it over

and look at the intricacy

of white

I look up

"This isn't beautiful

Nor romantic.

But I do love you"

The tears create marks

when they fall down

your flushed face

eyes red from crying

"Sorry" you whispered

Reviews

[A. Amos]

Such an eloquent write, purely magic and loved the read...

[anna]

Thank you. c:

[Sami Khalil]

A good take on the universe and our place in it...Bravo.................

[anna]

Thank you. c:

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome...:)................

[Jarin R. S.]

I really enjoyed the first part of this free verse poem. Maybe because of the sci-fi nerd interwoven into my childhood. It has a very mystical feel about it. Charming in its own way. I was a little taken back over the structure of this poem. Because a structure like that usually entices a certain rhythm or rhyme of sorts. What would've been interesting was if you completely broke away from that structure and re-did everything in a story format. Make it a little bit longer and you got yourself a decent short story about cosmic love.

[anna]

Oh gosh, That's such a good idea, thank you. When I write it I will send you a read request. Thank you so much! :))

[anna]

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