The Fool: O

Last nigh I was doing a tarot reading for a friend and got the idea to write something for each card, something that represents what it stands for in a way. So this is the first of that series I guess you'd call it.

A light step, led by sparkling eyes,

A woman and a child in one.

Embracing ignorance for the sake of

Happiness she strides forward—

            Unafraid

                        Unaware

                                    And care free

Turning summersaults and cartwheels

She celebrates life like the rest of us never can.

Exploring the world, drinking it’s essence

The Fool, the Simpleton, the Child that refuses to grow up

            …and the only happy person I have ever known.

Author's Note

Soooom the original plan was to write a poem for each of the tarot cards... While I may still try it I don't think it's going to happen. The Magician, the next card of the deck is giving me problems. So this little series or whatever you want to call it is going to have to take a back seat for awhile... Sorry for those of you who liked the idea.

Reviews

[*~Imperfectly Me~*]

I think this is a wonderful piece and the original idea was a great idea but i know how the muses can be very tricky... this semester i have only completed a few pieces arg! Anyway, this was wonderful as i have already said. It's very thought provoking and makes the reader think.... does ignorance truly give bliss? if that is so than we all need to be a fool to truly be happy. This makes me think and wish for the simpler days when being a fool was okay. Nothing should be changed, i loved everything about it. GREAT JOB!

[Dan Bullock]

I hmmm'd in agreement in the end there, it reminded me of girls I know who are simultaneously happy and blind to other things but I somehow envy them in a (loving) way.

Good, direct write.

[Onyx Sky]

I love this... how many people have felt like a fool b/c of impulse decisions. I feel like the woman in the poem. beautiful

[Wondering Mind]

Very thought provoking, to say the least.

[Johnny Westbrook]

It's short, but still a very GREAT read. You explained the characters perfectly with only a few lines! I can see you making this into a short story if you wanted to continue with it. I look forward to reading more of your work. Keep me posted alright? Stay safe.

[Michael X]

imo, nothing needs to be changed, although "sparkling eyes"...cliche and classic,
the line is thread thin, and you've managed to capture it with classic,
touching effect, this is a beautiful writing its just that, whenever i see
the word..."that" I prefer to use "ing, instead.. but by no means does it
diminish the quality here, this is impressive in style and substance, Wow.

You have good format.

A slight spelling error (grow instead of grows)

It brings the message in a few lines well.

A good piece.

[Sarah]

LOVE IT. This is fantastic and such an original idea. Everything flows so well & I loved the unique way that this was written. Can't wait to read the rest!

[huma]

I find the archetype of the Fool to be quite interesting. The court jester is the only one who can tell the truth to the King without risk of harm and always uses humor to veil it. I think you have hit upon an important aspect of the fool which is its non-judgmental and open nature.

[Larissa G.]

It's a common theme, but I like the use of tarot cards to balance out the rather typical belief that fools are better off than the rest of us half the time.
So, interesting. Not bad. :)
Keep writing.