Now Serving Number 3

Written in May 2008. This was an attempt at writing a poem for the contest "A Precious Moment". I don't think it's quite what they meant but oh well...

For three years I have held hope close to my heart.

A hope that you would realize that my love is not

That of a friend. A hope that you would see my as

Beautiful, or desirable… Or as anything other

Than what I am. There is no doubt that you love me,

But as a sister loves another sister, which is not the love

I need.

 

For three years I have put my life on hold.

Changing myself so that I could fit into your dream.

Giving up things that I love, things that help keep

Me sane, simply because you’re not fond of them.

For three years I have sat, ready and waiting for you

To finally see me for what I really am, but the wait is over.

 

Before you even asked him out I knew

That you had found your superman.

The man who was the essence of your dreams.

When you shared the news that you were in love,

My heart broke, and yet I was also relieved…

For the first time in three years

I was not afraid to be myself.

 

My number was finally called,

And it is time for me to leave this waiting room for good.

I said goodbye to you today,

The first and only time that I will say it in fact.

And then I walked away and had my first

Cigarette in three years.

Reviews

[Jane]

Let me start off by saying that I understand this situation, that of liking another girl but her being straight... or just seeing you as a friend. It can be really painful.
I think you portrayed this very well in your poem, and the addition of the cigarette at the end really grounds the whole thing. Very nice work!
Thank you for sharing.

[Adela Muresan]

Oh, you can sense the pain in thease verses.

You make the unfortunate truth seem hard to bear by a loving heart.

A.M.

[NapoleonSolo]

This is a really great piece. The ending is just right. Although its personal to you, I find I can relate to it somewhat. You try so hard to hide the monster inside yourself in hopes that someone will love you more. Trying to walk away from it causes a feeling that you cant even begin to describe.

[Kaleidoscope Apocalypse]

I really liked this piece. I think that you portrayed your ideas quite wonderfully. I was pulled in from the very beginning and although I could not relate to this completely, I was able to envision it as though I could. You've created a piece that makes it possible to understand and and relate to, even if the circumstances aren't a part of the reader's life.

I liked the way you turned this into a real life situation; life isn't always happy and it doesn't always end in our favor. You've kept this piece real and I think that makes it even better.

Wonderful write!