Lingering Hope

Persevere through your issues and one day you will find peace within yourself

subtle worthy honor of oneself
uttered advances of believing in health
travelers will find their way back to safety
fright will unseemly pass and minds will have strength
shading in this journey will be pressed lips full of hope
past individuals with rough pasts will find silent vaults
that will help them realize that there is a safe place
that the little things shooting them down will suddenly become passing thoughts
that the pavement indeed isn’t a dark hole of pity
but instead a shallow, transparent hole of light
you are not alone
you are just following a path of others steps
they got out of it and so will you
peaceful flowers in your belief will sprout
and you’ll be recovered
don’t give up and keep this rare strength close to you

Reviews

[Nathaniel Ward]

I love this one a lot, hope never fades it is one thing that is always constant, never give in nor give up.

[Kerra]

that the little things shooting them down will suddenly become passing thoughts
that the pavement indeed isn’t a dark hole of pity
but instead a shallow, transparent hole of light
you are not alone

I really like these lines here, I can feel this write, this has me thinking, nicely written and expressed

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the journey and the positive ending dear Anna.
"peaceful flowers in your belief will sprout
and you’ll be recovered
don’t give up and keep this rare strength close to you"
We need belief and inner strength to survive. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Ashley long]

I like this alot, very creative.

[Rynn]

"subtle worthy honor of oneself
uttered advances of believing in health" - This is a very strong start, the idea captures me.

"travelers will find their way back to safety
fright will unseemly pass and minds will have strength" - I love how inspirational these lines are, despite the previous acknowledgment of unsettling things.

"shading in this journey will be pressed lips full of hope
past individuals with rough pasts will find silent vaults
that will help them realize that there is a safe place " - I find it interesting and beautiful what you've done with the imagery here.

"that the little things shooting them down will suddenly become passing thoughts
that the pavement indeed isn’t a dark hole of pity
but instead a shallow, transparent hole of light
you are not alone " - There is a steady and solid sense of hope in your writing, not only in what you are saying, but how you are saying it. I love that 'voice' you've established, it really emulates a kind of trust that the language has with the reader.

"peaceful flowers in your belief will sprout
and you’ll be recovered
don’t give up and keep this rare strength close to you " - Again, I love the imagery the text encourages.

Overall, I thought this was a very hopeful and concrete piece. It left me feeling not only inspired, but peaceful. Well done. Write on :)

-Rynn

[Lyssa]

Well written and has a great message for the reader to consider. Keep up the work, this is a piece I'll definitely continue to re-read for inspiration!

[Gejodi]

Like the straw that broke the camels back...sometime the little things can add up and overcome us to feed depression and despair....there is hope and a great message to pick them apart one at a time till we see the light...nicely written

[Peregrinator7]

I like how you wrote the poem in all lowercase. Really conveys the message! =)

[Locke Redwyne (night sy..]

Wow... I'm speechless! That is so good, and I can connect with this, I love it!

[wordman]

wonderful thoughts,don`t give up,you will find your self