Humanity is a ghost

humanity is a ghost
repelled by redemption
and pushed by exquisite minds
bright ideas under analytical judgement
didactically dissolving youth
before ideal minds are born
spark his forgetful memory of peace

Author's Note

Please be honest

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

It is sad. Few people sending food, water and medicine to the people in need. There are many. Where I live in Detroit. Group of people pick-up food and things being not used by companies. Feed the poor and homeless. I believe we can accept the naysayers or create a wave of concern, kindness and mercy. Humanity. Just sleeping. Need a loud wake-up call. Thank you Anna for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Anna]

I agree. Thank you for reading

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Anna.

[Rynn]

"humanity is a ghost " - this is an incredibly strong statement.

"repelled by redemption
and pushed by exquisite minds" - I enjoy the way you've opted out of punctuation and written in all lowercase. I believe it really aids the tone you were going for and achieves it quite well.

"bright ideas under analytical judgement
didactically dissolving youth " - nice alliteration.

"before ideal minds are born
spark his forgetful memory of peace" - I felt the end was a little abrupt in the way that it wasn't quite as smooth as the rest of the piece.

Overall, I enjoyed reading it and thinking about all that it implies. I would take another look at the ending. I'm not sure if it's the wording or the possible meaning that threw me off there, but again, the edits, if any, are up to you. :) Write on.

-Rynn

[Ace Jaxon]

I think that the point you are trying to make is very true, I also love the poem.

[Gejodi]

Innocence leaves us all too quickly before/in place of an ideal mind teaching us the nature of humanity...Great poem I like it!

[kylie]

your title automatically caught my attention, and when you say that humanity is a ghost it's really deep, because a ghost is an image of something that used to be alive and living, and comparing that to humanity is so true because humanity is slowly dying mentally and the word ghost describes it so well. Thank you for writing this

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it's almost as if humanity never existed--a ghost that many don't believe exists now or in the past...
interesting and very thoughtful write,
j.

[J. Hampton]

bright ideas under analytical judgement
didactically dissolving youth
before ideal minds are born
LOVE that!
it is a ghost that has taken full possession without hope of an exorcism
did I mention I love this

[Nipplegrinder]

Well conceived analytical piece. Great questions.

[wordman]

a touching write,and it is true,humanity is a ghost

[Savanna Robbins]

Ooh I love this creative and analytical great poem

[Anna]

Thank you so much