Too Far Away

How could I smile while I was in pain,

struggling not to miss every part of you,

feigning nonchalance when I heard your name,

just wanting to feel that you missed me,too.

As the days went by nothing changed,

I grew up used to not having what I lacked of,

I started to move on,altough the sorrow remained,

and I couldn't help but stop believing in love.

I loathed our memories, I replayed them every night,

how when you laughed yoou made my stomach flutter,

how you said that we were love at first sight

or that when I dressed up I made you stutter.

How could I forget what we had,

a love that seemed unstoppable but the distance cut.

How am I going to  rebuild my heart?

if we're still thousands of miles apart.

Author's Note

I hope you liked it. I'd really appreciate if you could review it so I can improve anything that can be improved.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

"How could I forget what we had,
a love that seemed unstoppable but the distance cut."
The poem is fine. You gave enough to create vision and thoughts. I like the above lines. Regret teaches us to be kinder and better to the new people who come into our life. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Sami Khalil]

I like this alot . Thank you for sharing good poetry...:)

[Glen Yumang Manese]

As the days went by nothing changed,
I grew up used to not having what I lacked of,
I started to move on,altough the sorrow remained,
and I couldn't help but stop believing in love.

I loathed our memories, I replayed them every night,
how when you laughed yoou made my stomach flutter,
how you said that we were love at first sight
or that when I dressed up I made you stutter.
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As the days went by nothing changed,
I grew up used to not having what I lacked of,
I started to move on,although the sorrow remained,
and I couldn't help but stop believing in love.

I loathed our memories, I replayed them every night,
how when you laughed you made my stomach flutter,
how you said that we were love at first sight
or that when I dressed up I made you stutter.

I will start off with the stuff we all hate to do editing...and now back to you work...this has the longing feel of wanting someone...and the end lines take that over the top with the question and last endearing lines:

How am I going to rebuild my heart?
if we're still thousands of miles apart.
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How am I going to rebuild my heart?
if we're still thousands of miles apart.

an extra space in there...the most common reads here on the Cafe...of heartbreaks and the proverbial word called...love...there must be a lot more break ups then love in the air...I presume...except I'd like to read one with both sides of the story matter...to reflect the intent on both thought process...see if the test of love is felt equally by both sides...

[WingedKurui]

"I started to move on,altough the sorrow remained," the altough, might want to be replaced with although. Also, I think you made a typo on this line: "how when you laughed yoou made my stomach flutter," it should be 'you."

As for the poem itself, it's got decent pace and wording, with the emotions also there. Something about it seemed somewhat factual to me, though it was good. Maybe the feeling of something being missed is what you intended, or was it more of a poem about figuring out how to get over someone? Either way, it sounds solid. Nice work.