Pieces Of Me

I've a blog names 'Pieces of Me' so I was writing a poem for my blog and this is what I came up with. I hope you like it, even though it's not that good. (:

Got these dreams of mine bottled up,

For when the night is dark,

And the fairies lose their way,

I’ll live with those dreams of mine,

And wait patiently for the day.

 

Got all the inspirations of mine penned down,

For when the sun doesn’t shine as bright,

And the rain starts to pour,

I’ll read from these frayed pages,

And lose myself in a fantastical lore.

 

Got all the memories put up in frames,

For if one day we wake up and forget,

How beautiful life can be,

I’ll see these pictures and remind myself,

To start again and pick up "

All the fallen pieces of me.

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Author's Note

I came up with this poem randomly while writing a blog post. I know it isn't very very nice but I still hope you'll like this. And it's kind of short but... well, just tell me what you think?!

Reviews

[Kelley]

I think it was really nice. Poems don't have to be long. As a matter of fact I prefer the sort ones. One can lose the meaning behind a long poem. This one was short and to the point. Never lose hope and never forget that life is beautiful.

Thanks for sharing.
Signet.

[Sakib]

This is nice. Nicely expressed and it tells a lot about you. Great write.

[Alicia™]

This is beautiful! The image I'm getting is of a starlit night… Nice job. :)

[serpent]

beautifully penned!

[Stammers]

It's tastefully put together, which although quite simple in message, will help it attract a second, third, fourth read - it's a basic message of self-preservation, hope and maybe loss of innocence 'this time round', nicely framed with some quirky imagery - it had an 'indie lyric' feel to it. I like the way you worded certain things 'got all the memories put up in frames'.

The dark twist at the end is the key to it all, throughout we see you are keeping safe the hopes and dreams of a more youthful/innocent you because you have experienced 'falling apart' - a pain, but what I found enduring was that you had not given up on them, you don’t talk about them in a way that scorns or discards them, as so many poems dealing with maturing and understanding life’s unfairness do - it's quite okay to have fairies, you just know now they might 'lose their way' occasionally – that’s quite refreshing and on an adult level – quite inspiring.

It's quite a deep poem the more I read it tbh, almost a commitment to the self to not abandon what is now questioned and put under threat, but adapt it and understand its place without bitterness.

[TeenRomance2]

I thought it was really good. I liked it.

[Coyote Poetry]

Yes easy to lose the dreams of youth. Sometime the world become too dark. But we must overcome the darkness and stay on the path of our dreams. I like the feel of the poem. Sometime I must re-organize my mind and thoughts to get back on track and not allow the bad to overtake the good. A very good ending to a poem that open up many good questions.
Coyote

[Tomi]

...starts to pour, not 'pore'. It's good, but it still needs to be tighter, the words kind of fly around.

[DannyLynne Riley]

I think its fantastic...nice flow and great use of theme... wrapped up very nicely...lessons we should all live by