Inhuman

Slithering my way into the woods...

Beyond the mysterious seas,

I turn around and see the moonlight...

Dancing on my scaly skin...

I spread my wings and take off into the darkest nights

In search for the treasures unknown...

For I am a gluttonous beast.

I breathe out the flames...

Burning in my heart, ever since the beginning of time...

I am a murderous fiend, a sadistic brute...

I’d love to see life slowly drain out of you...

So, come to me and let me put an end...

To your obnoxious existence...

I’d lure you into my den and tear you into pieces...

Come and let me dig, my teeth into your soft flesh...

All I desire for is your blood...

All I want to hear is your excruciating scream...

I’m not ashamed of my iniquity...

For I am Inhuman...

 

Author's Note

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Reviews

[.Bunnie.]

^.^ Once again, child, you never cease to amaze me! You're going to make me repetitive at saying "Omigawsh I love it!" :P And well, at the sake of sounding repetitive....I loved it! LoLz.

Only thing I suggest is taking out the , in this sentence:
"Come and let me dig, my teeth into your soft flesh..."

Keep it up, Signet! :)

[Offline]

A captivating, steady flow that runs through veins of terrible menace and staggering beauty. Words cannot describe the inhuman desire for words... best poem I've read so far on WC.

- Esp

[Hippy]

very interesting, i love how inhumane people and actions are so easy to write about in a sarcastic way i like how you compare it to many beasts as well not being specific in which ones, but i love how evil you make it sound and it actually is,

[Paul Okeke]

honestly you are a good poet...love this,Come and let me dig, my teeth into your soft flesh...All I desire for is your blood.....really made me more interested in reading

[Adelia Alighieri]

I found an over use of the ellipses, could have been equally entertaining and effective if you had used semi colons or commas. That's just a suggestion. :)

But on the whole, I loved the concept and the flow, very well written.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the poem. The monster of the woods always make a good story. Description and story is very good. A fun poem to be able to read.
Coyote

[Libby McKeown]

Iniquity, what an awesome word! I love the menace, the darkness, and the unabashed lust for cruelty. Writing should be bold and shameless! Some suggestions: 'all i desire is your blood," lose the "for." Also, the lines would pack more punch without the "for" in "I am inhuman" and "I am a gluttonous beast." Hope this helps. Keep writing!

[Christopher.Holmberg]

This is magnificant !! truly...The imagery is perfect and this was well written well expressed and well thought through. No complaints . thjank you

[Domo]

This is amazing in my opinion. It describes such a dark figure, in such a beautiful and mysterious way.
~D♥m♥~

[Marlena]

Nifty work, nice use of imagery ^_^