Tonight, I unveil myself...

I drop my mask tonight,

I unveil all my imperfections, I hid so long,

I let you see all my flaws,

See, I’m not perfect, you were wrong.

I step out of my masquerade tonight,

Revealing all my wounds and scars,

The very scars, the time can’t erase,

The very wounds, the perpetuity can’t heal.

I let my guard fall for once,

Let the walls I built crumble.

I’m tired of pretending,

I divulge the repulsive me.

Turn away if you want, leave me like all else,

As I gather enough of me to put on the mask again,

To hide my blemishes,

I see you looking at me; I guess you don’t want me now,

I turn to walk away,

I get ready to step out, to forget you forever,

‘I love you, you’re still my angel’ is all you say...

Author's Note

Please tell me what do you think about it... Hope you like it!

Reviews

[.Bunnie.]

Signet...dearie, I don't know WHAT it is, but I always enjoy reading everything you write! It's just refreshing...that's so nice. :) Once again, I love this piece.

Just a couple tiny little things I noticed and wanted to point out. I hope you don't mind my critiquing? :)

"I drop my mask tonight,
I unveil all my imperfections, I hid so long," I would suggest taking out the comma in the second line, and adding "for" >>
"I drop my mask tonight,
I unveil all my imperfections I hid for so long," Just flows smoother this way. :)

"The very scars, the time can't erase,
The very wounds, the perpetuity can't heal."

[Obsidian Blackbird McNi..]

i for one found this to be well composed and thought out. I like the way you take a theme: self acceptance, and make it feel fresh. ta

[WriterMe]

suggestions? Why? It was perfect. According to me at least. It was very well thought of and worded.
Just one itty bitty thing:
I divulge the repulsive me.

You should say: I divulge the repulsive nature in me.

But still somehow, this sentence doesn't fit in the over all feel you have put into the poem. But then again, its just my opinion =]

I thought it was wonderful over all. Life would be so easy if we let all our walls down and show people who we really are. If they accept us for that then well and good. If they dont then all we can say is 'their loss'
good job =]