Another Cinderella Story

Every day I hope to see you

And talk to you

Wishing to be closer

And see who you truly are

 

Your image haunts me

Like a song stuck in my head

At days I accept it

At day I don’t

 

Chorus:

Are you the prince in my Cinderella story?

Are you the one that will understand me?

Cuz right now,

My feelings tell me that you are the one

 

Your smile makes me smile

Even in the saddest of days

I love the way you smile

So just smile at me all the time

 

Chorus

 

Can you be the one?

 

Chorus

 

Do you see me the way I see you?

Would you think of me more than a friend?

I want to know

I want to know

The way you think of me

 

Reviews

[Rika]

I agree, sounds some hit song on the radio. Keep up the good work!

[Pencrafter]

A songwriter! Your poem is lovely, causing me to want to run up the grassy hillside and pick wildflowers. Sorry, got carried away. The only thing I might suggest would be found in the second verse, the last two lines. Instead of 'At days' you might try 'Some days'. No big deal. It's a nice poem.

[WickedPenWielder]

I agree this kind of puts me in a taylor swift mindset of music and i like the lyrics. Add to it :)

[EYES OF MY SOUL]

It was different first time i read something like this and see it actually succeed,nice work.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very nice flow of words and thoughts. The mind wondered and wandered into hope for a perfect pardner in life. I like the questions brought to life by the poem. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[∠( ᐛ 」..]

nice lyrics. it would be awesome if it was in a song XD

[Persona]

Woo! Someone else who does lyrics. I could imagine myself singing this - kind of like a Taylor Swift thing "I'm lovely and no one sees it" sort of storyline. I would love to see you add more to this! With a bridge and deeper meanings in it and shorter lines and longer lines (like fast and slow bits)!

[SeventhSin]

hmmm.... Interesting :) I like it.