Time

Tick tock

Time is going by every second,

every minute,

every moment.

 

It going by too quickly.

I want to freeze it at times,

when I need it the most!

 

Tick-Tock

It's passing me by.

I wonder if I'm doing everything that

I wanted to do

before times up.

 

Am I living life right?

Tick-Tock

Am I doing all that I should?

 

At times I feel like

I'm loosing it,

waisting it.

 

But I want to do so much more!

 

Tick-Tock

It's passing me by.

I wonder if I'm doing everything that

I wanted to do

before times up.

Author's Note

thoughts? If theres grammar mistakes please let me know!

Reviews

[quinfinn]

you often hear of people saying that , in the moment , time drags on ...and in retrospect, it was all a blur. you have reversed that message here and i find it to be curious and exciting. what a splendid take on the bane of our existence. well done , blue! oh," wasting"...not" waisting".....

[RachelReaper]

Sounds like a song I would make up if I was in the insane asylum and sing to myself with frequent maniacal laughs. In other words, its covered in awesomesauce, as one of my favorite books would say.

[MichaelGrisby]

Very nice! I like the use of the "Tick-Tock" because it got me thinking about time and how important it is to us. It got me thinking about life and how short it actually is.

[deepblue04]

thanks!

[Jetta Zippora]

Very nice! Quirky, lively, and a great salute to time and its meanings. I can't wait to read more of your writing, friend. :)

[deepblue04]

thanks a lot!

[Cynthia Man]

I like this a lot, a very straightforward poem, and I like it! Time do slip away from us every second, every moment. And to treasure it, we can only value every single second we go through.
Anyways, I love the " Tick-Tock" really much, and I like the questions you made throughout the poem as well!
NIce written!

[deepblue04]

thanks!

[Samantha Lynn]

PS. Sorry for the delay on this review. I have been gone all last week. But I will be catching up on everything.

I like the repeat of the words "tick-tock". It works and I know how this feels. Time is passing by so fast, and you are wondering if you are sepending every second of it right. Well, everyone feels that way at some point in their life. The Key is to just live life how you want it to be like. If you are happy then everything will seem easier.

[deepblue04]

thanks

[The dark story]

hm...when i read the very first line..it reminded me of that time when i was in first grade and recited a poem in front of the whole school for the first time.and it was about"Time" too...anyway.a very nice and enthralling piece of writing..everyone questions with themselves at some point of time that are they living to their fullest or not.doing what is right or not............i sorely like the the
me of this poem....and that repetition of the clock's sound too....nice work!!!!

[deepblue04]

thanks!

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the use of the clock. Time make things seem more important. I like the feel of desperation to get sometime done ASAP. Thank you for the excellent poem.
Coyote

[deepblue04]

thanks!

[The Watcher]

This is quite an interesting poem. I definitely can relate to this too. Anyhoo, very well written and kudos!

100/100

[deepblue04]

thanks!

[The Watcher]

You're welcome!

[Pencrafter]

Your poem is simple, easy to understand, yet states a most profound question in life. "Am I living life right?", or "Am I doing all that I should?". The subject of the nature of time itself is being debated. How we measure time changes through history, with our 12 hour clock coming from the Babylonians. It also depends on our own perception or viewpoint. Some of my friends feel that spending time on the Internet and 'Cafe' is a complete waste. ANYWAY. Your poem is interesting and relevant.

[deepblue04]

thanks!!