Make A Move

this poem is a bit lengthy xD

Why are you quiet?

You're not like this near your friends

Your buddies are talkative

I always see you peeking

Over where I am

In the classroom

And you know it, too

Don't be nervous.

That's what I'm thinking about

Every day when

You're sitting behind me.

Wondering if you're looking at the board

Or at me.

Don't worry about rejection.

Let me worry about that.

You're the man, you have the upper hand

By default

Don't let me

Take that away from you.

My instinct is saying that there's something

About us, but it's unclear.

My mind is confused.

That's why I stay quiet.

I don't want to make

The same mistake

Just like with

The others.

Why can't it be easier to read you guys?

It's difficult.

And it takes a while to solve.

If nothing's there, then that's fine.

It gives me one less thing to worry about.

I guess...

Take a risk.

Talk to me.

Nothing bad will happen.

See how my reaction is a smile

When you

Make a move

Author's Note

i just thought of something: does length really matter in a poem? i've seem poems that are longer than this one, but does it matter when you want someone else to read it?

Reviews

[SeanJHarper]

I know nothing about poetry but the words flowed very well to me. You summed up the story element of this well. It had an open conclusion.
You could write a sequal to this.
Did she accept? Did he make his move and if so how? All these things are worth exploring.

You chose your words well I can't see anyting that was wasted here. Length...well how long is a piece of string? Like I say I don't know anything about poetry but my feelings on elements of story are that stories are however long they need to be.

When writing it is always a good idea to concentrate on writing and not how many words the story accumulantes. You can always trim down when the first draft is comepleted.

I liked this and wish you well in your writing.

[Andy]

I've ran into this problem so many times >.

[Aka_Kitsune]

excellent poem, it has real meaning to it. i don't believe length matters in a poem whatsoever, great job