In awe of her

The rose melted lips 

of hers, 

hugged in rosiness 

to conceal their words, 

just like the lily's 

that blushed in treacly sense 

when the bees kissed them. 

The quivering eyelashes 

of hers, 

fluttered in naughtiness 

to sometimes blink 

and to sometimes wink, 

just like the innocence 

in my eyes 

that surrendered 

unto a heavenly uneasiness 

to hide from their seething arrows. 

The jet black strands of hair 

of hers, 

wore the scent 

of the blossoming jasmine 

to touch the soft skin 

beneath my ears, 

just like the waves 

of silken touch 

and of raging love 

that furiously galloped 

lashing at my heart shore. 

The satin fur skin 

of hers, 

tasted me sublime 

and embraced me 

in the eternal warmth, 

just like the crescent hung moon 

that awaited to be 

adored and relished 

to bring its pristine soul alive 

to make love 

forever and forever... 

30th Oct 2007, by Abhilash Hegde

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I'm not a fan of romantic love poems becuz, like this one, it's mostly about the physical, & always the same over-celebrated aspects of one's physical presence. These types of poems bore me to tears. But I have to say that the originality of your word-crafting does bring this poem alive with dynamic imagery for all the senses. I disagree that anyone should be IN AWE of anyone else . . . it's a ridiculous state of mind . . . just euphoria & unrelated to the reality of getting along as 2 human beings. That's why I would love to know if the object of this obsession has a personality of any kind? Sorry for being so tough on this poem! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Abhilash Hegde]

Dear Margie, thank you for being so direct in your assessment of this poem and sharing your keen perspectives. I'm so glad and appreciate you shared the true honest words of what you thought of this poem. Love poems come in various shapes and form, this poem is mushy, does celebrate the aspects of physicality but more so in a way of paying respects in admiration. In my personal opinion, one can be in awe of beauty - beauty can be external or internal and one may pay homage to the beautiful aspects of body, soul, character or any features of the person they respect. Beauty is after all to be celebrated - it's a God's gift and deserves to be respected, wondered and admired.
There's no object of obsession here, I agree on the reality of getting along as 2 human beings is a thought on the dot. I wrote this poem long-way back, back in my early years. One always has various stages of life, love and everything- as we tread along the life journey we experience different aspects, learn from our experiences and transform our thoughts. Thank you again for stopping by, reading me and reviewing this write. Best, Cheers! Abhi.

[horizon]

It's just awesome...no words...it can only be felt...wow...

[Abhilash Hegde]

I'm glad to know, you could feel the words and the feeling that I wished to bring about. Thank you, Horizon for reading and sharing your beautiful thoughts!

[horizon]

Romance is what the other way of showing depth of love..it's not only by touching...romance is watching into the eyes and jst feel energised.....

[Abhilash Hegde]

yeah, totally agree!

[Bala Gorthi]

Wow! Romance flowing delicately laced in descriptive imagery!
Your presentation brings beauty to the subject. Loved reading this beautiful poetry. Very sweetly written.
Kudos to your ability to bring out beauty and literal romance in simple verses!
Thanks for sharing . Keep writing.:-)

[Abhilash Hegde]

Thank you, Bala. True beauty is mesmerizing and I hope I could convey that feeling through images in this write..

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Another fine write, Abhilash.

Again, a very good choice of words and descriptive imagery, all flowing very well and delicately from beginning to end. A poem reminiscent of the Romantics, where the poet literally drips love for the object of his affection on to the page.

Very nice writing!

[Abhilash Hegde]

Thanks Doodley for a encouraging review. I'm glad to know you liked the imagery. Appreciate you stopping by and sharing your thoughts buddy!

[Anindita Janhabee]

Oh.. so sweet and romantic...
you have a good sense of describing which when a reader reads, feels like it's going before him or her. It makes a picturesque infront of me, especially the jet black hair part . .. it's too good....
Anindita : )

[Abhilash Hegde]

Thank you Anindita.. I'm very glad to know you could picture the write and see through the words. Appreciate you stopping by and sharing your thoughts :)

[Bear]

Critique: (that blushed in treacly cense) sense

Review: Bravo! Silky smooth words pour from you as a river of warm emotions, I am glad you only use your verbal powers for good. Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[Abhilash Hegde]

Thanks so much Bear, for the review. Those were indeed very kind words, I'm glad you liked it.
That's a great catch. I believe, that was an incorrect usage of 'cense'. That was very helpful!