Strums Of Silence

in conversation with oneself, to question and reason out with your soul

Lips may stay silent,

But the silence lingers on,

As they turn into words

And speak to me.

In those melting tears, 

Held in your eyes,

What will you melt?

With the aching heart,

Dipped in melancholy,

What will you rinse?

In the disguised smiles

And the playful winks,

What will you hide? 

In the flames of past

And the pains that don't last,

Will you burn your Identity?

In numbness of void

Tied to the shackles of blame,

Will you bury those untrue lies?

On the walks of life,

When the reality bites

And the steps stumble,

Would you abandon

Those dreams in fear?

O' you mute soul

Even I'm a part of you.

Hear my mum words

And see those unturned gleams.

02 May 2008 , by Abhilash Hegde

Reviews

[barleygirl]

The best thing about your poem, for me, is the way you ask many questions of the other person as if you really want to know. So often, poets have all the answers & supposing what the other person is thinking or feeling (a bad human trait). I crave a poem where the narrator asks the best kinds of questions which show he/she really wants to understand this other person. Also, overall, your writing is fresh & original & unexpected, even tho you're writing about familiar stuff, you make interesting observations that fall outside the norm -- and I love living outside the norm! (((HUGS))) fondly, Margie

[Abhilash Hegde]

the only way to understand anything is to ask questions, as many questions as you can :) We need to make effort to understand the other person, if we really care.. everyone needs a patient hearing or a nudge or a conversation to know beyond the ordinary. Thank you for making pertinent observations on my writing and value your thoughts and perceptions on my writes. Thanks much, Margie. Cheers, Abhi

[barleygirl]

I love your attitude . . . more people with this approach would cut down on the constant-critic approach of so many . . .

[Abhilash Hegde]

I hear you Margie :)
Thank you so much again for taking time to read me and share your thoughts on my writes.
Really appreciate it, Cheers Abhi

[Chris Shaw]

I feel a sunken soul here. Sunk to the depths of the ocean floor who can not recall the gleams in life. Feels like depression. Great poetic expression Abhi and I enjoyed the format and structure of your stanzas.

Chris

[Abhilash Hegde]

Actually, wrote this poem for a friend, who was in distress. I hoped I could uplift them through reasoning and thoughts of this write. Thank you much Chris for reading and sharing a thoughtful review on this write!

[X]

of mum words and silent cries...the things we reveal and the things we hide...the few we allow to see us naked and vulnerable...

In numbness of void
Tied to the shackles of blame,
Will you bury those untrue lies?

How deep does it get?

[Abhilash Hegde]

very well put, Kira. I like your thoughts on this and agree. We may need to swim to our depths and uncover the treasures that lay beneath the clutter of ourselves. Truly! Thank you for reading this and stopping by !

[X]

Always my pleasure!

[Crimson_ish]

"With the aching heart,
Dipped in melancholy,
What will you rinse?"

This poem was cathartic for me, really. The questions posed and the answers evokes, this poem lingers in deeper levels of emotions. I loved it, thought provoking.

[Abhilash Hegde]

Crimson_ish, I'm glad you took time for this poem and thanks a bunch for the review.
It's good to know, the poem touched you deeply! Thanks much :)

[.]

The war within......we can all relate to that. Especially all of us poets, such fragile, sensitive souls are we.

Everyone has times of crisis in their lives, some more than others, and it is in such times that we really dig deep into the core of our being, searching for the missing particles of our outward lives. I can truly relate to this piece, Abhilash. Some of us have walked through the fire time and time again. We burn and endure. And then we burn again some more.
A very astute, relevant poem you have written. Very nicely done.

[Abhilash Hegde]

Thanks Doodley, for dropping by and sharing your thoughts on this one.
I'm glad you could relate to it :)

[EyesFullOfHope]

Nicely captured the feeling. We all go through some phase where we want to let go of hope. If we somehow manage to keep holding on to it, it helps us survive through those difficult phases.

"In the flames of past
And the pains that don't last,
Will you burn your Identity?" --Beautiful!

[Abhilash Hegde]

very well said :) Thanks so much, EyesFullOfHope .. for the kind review!
I'm glad you could connect to it.
Appreciate, you stopping by :)

[Érenn]

This a very relatable poem for me at the least. Feels like introspection. One of those days huh? I can understand I do it more often than not. The tone maybe moody, but the words still flow very easily. The flow is maintained throughout the write. My favourite verses were these two, they were simply too good and I marvel the you have presented it:
Lips may stay silent,
But the silence lingers on,
As they turn into words
And speak to me.

In numbness of void
Tied to the shackles of blame,
Will you bury those untrue lies?

[Abhilash Hegde]

I'm glad to know, you could relate to it.
Infact, I must admit .. I didn't write it for myself, it was for a friend, who was in distress.
And, all I thought to myself was, how could one see themselves any lesser and weaker. We have to be stronger and love ourselves always. Fight it out, talk yourself out of it and come out all guns blazing. So, that's the background of the write, If I may confess.

Thanks Errenn, for your kind review. Appreciate, you taking out time for this write.

[Érenn]

Your welcome ^^

[Katelyn Gilcrease]

There's a very moody feeling to this. People deal with inner conflicts and sometimes questions are thought to themselves; questions that have yet to recieve an answer. The title fits the work very well also. Very nice!

[Abhilash Hegde]

Thank you so much, katelyn. Yeah, this write has a certain mood to it. It's kinda, natural to introspect once in a while. I do it, often than not :) There's no better way set your thoughts free in space to seek some answers to questions that crop up in your head. Appreciate, you taking out time to review this one. Thanks again, for stopping by.

[Katelyn Gilcrease]

It's something I do often also, so I can relate to it fairly well. But you're very welcome. :)