Immortality

Fantasies exist if your desire burns within.

Weird thoughts invade my mind,
Thinking of being another kind.

I've often wondered of immortality,
Would it really be hard for that to be.

Imagine a life to be cherished together
Knowing my love would be yours forever.

Endless nights of looking at beautiful skies,
Filled with passion, never with lies.

Feeling your hungry desires to take me,
Ohh, how delicious that would be.

You would be mine in a lust filled night,
Holding on to ecstasy with all our might.

But be careful of what you wish and want,
You might be what immortality will haunt.

Reviews

[Anand Sehgal]

I've often wondered of immortality,
Would it really be hard for that to be.

you spoke my mi8nd :) loved the theme quite a lot :)
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[Chris]

The last stanza held bite and truth...

[wordman]

yes be careful in what you wish it might come true

[SonOfPlunder]

Dark, this grabbed me instantly. Must be influenced by vampires. Nice piece

[Shaquana Adams]

A beautiful take on immortality. I thought of vampires lol. Nice poem :)

[SAYED THANGAL]

when I read this , came to my mind the ''immortality , an ode of Wordsworth, good poem, well done

[lovejulez03]

This was very interesting :) you played on all emotions very well and didn't overdo it with a bunch of extra stuff that wasn't needed. Well done and thanks for sharing!

[Angie G]

Thank you for reading my work.. hope I can continue entertaining your minds!!!

[PurpleQuartz]

A very interesting thought. Immortality, a curse or a blessing...
Brilliant write!!!

[M.K. Jawdat]

Great poem. I liked it. Very nice.