Echoes

Albert's Poetry Cafe ~ Poet Craft: Form 'Monosyllabic'- http://www.writerscafe.org/contests/9347/

 

No new thing

World mass cry

Play, talk, feel

Echo

At one time

As young and

As old as

Dawn

 

 

Bow, nod, slip

Wink, sing, trip

Hear the lost

Echo

In the past

Cast play back

See fail call

feel

 

 

Man if east

Ask great truth

To free echo:

Now

Left out fear

At track ions

Nod to joy

Smile

 

 

Reviews

[Salvatore Buttaci]

It's very good, but the rules called for one stanza only.

[angelina neves]

Sorry! Something went wrong in my copy and past and i didn't go back to check... de two 1st lines were missing and also the last one... But i edit and now it is "complet"!
Thanks

[Salvatore Buttaci]

I like your poem, but it doesn't follow the rules of the contest form:

One stanza of eight lines.

Each line contains a certain number of words and each word contains only one syllable!

LINE: NUMBER OF WORDS

1 3
2 3
3 3
4 1
5 3
6 3
7 3
8 1

[An owl on the moon]

What an amazing form, and you have miraculously brought it to life through a dance of words! So well done... I love the glimpses and colorful thoughts...

[James Paulin]

I like the staccato style of this poem because the words you have choosen each cause an independant impression that tells a story like scenes in a play or even better, a collage. Unique and fascinating.