�War Hero�

Albert's Poetry Caf� - USING TEN WORDS, WRITE A POEM THAT IS NO MORE, OR LESS THAN 40 WORDS: Pitch/ Throat /Scraped /Landed /Lamentations / Breaking /Fat /Sorrow /Alphabet /Unpolished

 

Scrapped history

Breaking reality

Into fat sorrow

 

Decorated frill:

Mission to kill

 

Unpolished existence

Landed in lamentations

 

Behind each pitch to fame

 “Cut one’s throat”

Is the evil game

 

Recognition filed

Alphabet or number

Inexistence touch

 

The human is dead

….

Reviews

[Wondering Mind]

This is a fine piece of powerful poetry, even more so considering the constraints.

[Morning Song]

Wow. Great job on using the ten words!!!

What a powerful poem, my dear friend, and filled with your usual natural wisdom, the type of wisdom that cannot be taught in school. It is an awareness of human nature. You would think that mankind, after reading the pages of history, that we would learn the price and futility of war. And yet, we do it again and again, and again.

"The human is dead..." Wow. Your ending sentence scares the heck out of me. (sigh).

Great big hugs and kisses....
Jeri

[kruser23]

i thought i would reply to a piece of yours, since you replied to one of mine.

This was very powerful in its brevity. I think the colour really added to the strength too, sort of gave it a certain feeling even prior to the read.


Anways, im babbling. Nice work.

[Sharon Miller Bolander]

Well done, Angi! Perfect ending, too. Sharon

[Frank Terino]

the ending is quite poerful, this is an excellent weaving of words, and as equally creative
at executing the challange. Clever and crafty, I enjoyed reading this great poem, thanks

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Great! Great! Great! Three cheers for Angelina.

Sal

[Helena]

Wow! Superb poem....very cleverly written indeed.
Very good job Angi! Keep up the wonderful work poetess extraordinare!

Helena