In a colorful kite flying away

- Albert's Poetry Caf� challenge - Short rondel /French form = twelve line poem in two six line stanzas The final in each stanza is a repetition of the first phrase in line one. Lines can be of any length bar for the repeated phrase. Syllabic but in Engli

 

In a colorful kite flying away, filled with words

Experiences of my singing heart cords

I let it go with the moving wind of time

Hoping someone else can find the rhyme

Teaching this alive habit of eliminating hate

In a colorful kite flying away

 

I gather the best ideas of dreams I have found

Together with some tender laughing sound

Of feelings, unconditional love and hopes

Holding playful images in dancing ropes

Expecting them to live, reinforcing a better fate

In a colorful kite flying away

Reviews

[JohnL]

I love this poem. I have never fkown a kite yet watching them fascinates me. Kites are allegorical and can represent so much; grace, pain (crashing), freedom (to fly) bondage (on a string), happiness (bright colour) et al. Your lovely poem reminded me of one by Adrian Plass, a poet I very much admire and whom I have heard reciting his own work. He did a piece on kites which I found very moving. Perhaps you'd like to read it:
When I'm in heaven
Tell me there'll be kites to fly,
The kind they say you can control
Although I never did for long,
The kind that spin and spin and spin and spin
Then sulk and dive and die,
And rise again and spin again,
And dive and die and rise up yet again,
I love those kites.
Adrian Plass

I enjoy these challenges, don't you. They keep us on our mettle and stop us becoming sloppy.

Kind regards, JohnL

[Helena]

Extraordinarily beautiful Angi! Full of superb images, sweet and gentle write.

Helena

[Poeticpiers]

nicely done M lady loved your flying kite theme

[Conversations Kill]

I love it!!!! that is all, I am sorry that I have no review, but I woudn't change a thing.

[angelina neves]

Short rondel, French form = twelve line poem in two six line stanzas The final in each stanza is a repetition of the first phrase in line one. Lines can be of any length bar for the repeated phrase. Syllabic but in English tend to become Iambic. Rhyme pattern
A-----B
B
c
c
a
A

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d
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e
a
A