How could you? - The one

How could you? - The one

A Poem by Angelus

How could you just look me straight in the eyes

and say all these words

Didn’t you realize my love

that I was the one?

Or maybe I was so blind

by this love of mine

That in the end I was the one

To fool myself

 

How can someone you trust

 be the one who hurts

Was I just some kind of jerk?

You wanted, you had and you throw away!

How can it be that way?

How can you be this way?

 

How can the one

I love be the one

Who breaks my heart?

Tearing it apart

Leaving just an empty         space

Once I saw love in your face

Now its only hatred…

 

To me you were more than some pretty face

It may sound absurd

But even I have the right to dream

I was just crazy or was it all a lie

I am done…I guess it has to be goodbye.

 

© 2008 Angelus


Author's Note

Angelus
These are my words to express the emotions during a phase of breaking -

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This is awesome and I've felt the same myself in the past. I'm sure many readers could make the same connection. If you want to be ambitious, I could suggest using some stronger verbs and some comparative images. For example, maybe you could use ripping instead of tearing on the fourth line in the third paragraph. I don't know, that's all just me though. Great Job.

Posted 16 Years Ago


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This is awesome and I've felt the same myself in the past. I'm sure many readers could make the same connection. If you want to be ambitious, I could suggest using some stronger verbs and some comparative images. For example, maybe you could use ripping instead of tearing on the fourth line in the third paragraph. I don't know, that's all just me though. Great Job.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

intense.

Posted 16 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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I am who u want me to be, who i desperately want to be like an empty shell who wants to be filled and just feel.. -I normally express mostly in french but i am glad to be able to express in english... more..

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