Miss Perfect

I don't want to be your friend

You can forget about the love,

You want me to send,

I'm not letting you,

Walk all over me,

You say one thing isn't right,

You talk trash

You have a list of things that’s not right,

 

I won't let you make changes

Just so you can use me in the end

Make me feel I have no self-worth,

When you see me,

Whether you like it or not

You decide to be my friend,

No trash talk,

 

I won't let your thoughts chase me,

So I will be afraid,

Because I don't want to change,

I can tell, what’s on your list: 

I don't want to dress,

To how you want me to,

I won't change my hair

To how you like it

I won't act,

To how you want me to,

This isn't fair

It gives my heart so much pain

I can't be how you want me to be

I don't want to be your MISS PERFECT

If I was, I wouldn't be writing this

Instead I would be dead

 

So think again,

Control freak,

Pick on someone else, not me

 

Reviews

[Undying Glory]

yeah sometimes there's the people who always expect FAR too much of us. really gets one down, so nice job writing it down here. however i do agree with demien that some periods may do this one some good. anyway, thought this was a great piece everyone can relate to in one way or another. awesome

[Syldor]

First off you need to switch out many of your commas with periods. You've basically got one giant run on sentence. I realise some do not believe gramma to be all that big a deal in poetry, and that's fine. However without the periods it is very difficult to tell where one thought ends and another starts up. I have to pause and re-read over and over again to try and understand what you mean to say. A comma indicats a pause, or a joining of either two whole or partial ideas. There are ecellent uses of commas in the poem, but several should/could be replaced with a period.

The poem in itself is very strong. You do a good job of explaing what is makeing you angry as well as giving your reasons for that anger.

[Tina Kline]

Yeah, kick those control freaks to the curb. It's impossible to make them happy and in the end, why would anyone want to?

[Coyote Poetry]

People want control will only get worst. Better to escape while you can. A very strong poem. Your attitude and emotion is right in this poem. I like the ending. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Bridget Mcmaken]

Right to the point! Amazing poem! All girls should see this. But not all of them do. When a guy gets to controling they do what they are told others dont and just leave.

[Adelia Alighieri]

Sharply written. I found it exaggerating at times, but that fits in completely mainly because that's what it should be about. Thanks for sharing, enjoyed reading it.

[nono]

Very nice...A lot of people feel like this sometimes...No ones perfect and if someone thinks that...Then they need a reality check....Because after school is the real world...And people won't tolerate someone like that. I like this write it's nice and definitely kept my interest.

[NoneOfYourBusiness akaK..]

potent shout against selfish self absorbed automatons who would love to assimilate anyone with an original thought or original character~ excellent scream against banal and non productive shallow conformity~ ALWAYS be true to who you are~

Well Done!!~