Selfish

My first upload in 8 years. And it’s a bitter take on things.

Who are you?
A Scream?
There isn’t room for two
Don’t be so keen

Back off a bit please
This is mine!
And those are my keys!
Don’t cross the line

No Sharing from me
So go on now
Jump into the sea
Avoid that cow!

The selfish
Just laugh about
I wouldn’t want to kiss
A head full of doubt

Author's Note

My first poem after a long, needed break. My aim is maintain the selfish vibes through out this written piece.

Reviews

[wtp]

You are certainly returning with a strong statement! Between the words of the poem, your own summary of "a bitter take on things" and the 8 year hiatus, there was a lot for readers to digest.

I am not a poet, so I could never critique rhyme or meter, but I will offer my take on what I hear and feel. Anytime I read something and it makes me think -- constructing a larger story, or considering problems or issues new to me -- then I am happy I read it.

First, I found myself creating story lines to flesh out the details. After a second read, I was thinking that a certain level of selfishness is healthy for all of us. When you can inspire that much brain activity in sixteen short lines, that is good writing.

Thanks for sharing.

[R E Tree]

I understand it very well. The summary has that weird approach of “you either like or hate it”. The attitude is to take it or leave it. This might be quite hesitant for some readers. Not too welcoming but thats the whole point of being selfish even towards the reader. And yes I agree, selfishness can be healthy when it comes to the right person to demonstrate it.

[Sami Khalil]

You are someone not to be messed with, not to trample upon and not to underestimate. Whoa!
Powerful statements you make!
Excellent.

[R E Tree]

Wise words. Very accurate. And don’t I know it.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! You are welcome...

[lightsong]

I read a strong and raging poem here, the first verse put me in the moon of like a "needed" selfishness, You know my friend sometimes You need to be selfish to protect yourself and give it its worth. after eight years welcome back and write on ❤️

[R E Tree]

Thank you for warm welcome. I’m glad to be back. I’m pleased you have picked up on the raging feel to the poem. It was my aim to maintain it through out.

[Unspoken poet]

I think we all are a little selfish, but we do what we have to do to stand on own two feet,
This is really good.....

[R E Tree]

I’m pleased you have read my poem. And thank you for your kind words. I will be returning the favour very shortly.

[barleygirl]

I am 65 & I've lived in a selfish way, no relationships, no kids. I love it. I see no reason why everyone should be expected to follow the sociability norm if it doesn't resonate for them. Your poem is appropriately strident & unequivocal (((HUGS)))

[R E Tree]

I don’t blame you at all. You’ve done yourself a good favour. You do right in yourself and others will not take over.

[Coyote Poetry]

Hello my friend. Warm days make people escape the computer. Winter is the time to create. The site is okay. We must review and share. I befriended many and I have learn to write better. I enjoyed the old poem and I hope you are doing well and having some fun.
Coyote

[R E Tree]

Thank you for your introduction. I agree with you on that. I felt the cold air today. And it made me want to carefully write more than ever.

[Coyote Poetry]

Me too. Cold days keep me inside and time to write and read. You are welcome.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I'm glad you've found your pen again.

[R E Tree]

Me too. I remember the days when this website was full of different people. There use to be over 100 users online every day. I wish I could go back to it.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Yes now your stuck with us old farts. :) I miss it too.

[R E Tree]

For the moment yes. But at some point it will pick up.

[Chris Shaw]

Ah, selfish. I did think of siblings back in the day who didn't want to share. Pleased to say as they got older they learned to be more loving and giving. Selfish is not a positive attribute :) Thst:s where my mind drifted reading your words.

Chris

[R E Tree]

Thank you Chris for your insight. You are right, selfish is not a positive attribute. It relates to a lot of jealousy, hatred and bitterness. But to learn to be selfish for a good reason makes good boundaries. This can be a very useful outcome. A learning curve. An intellectual experience.

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Sometimes this type of emotion is needed to remind one's self of their own value. Not to be defined by others. Be who you are a complex human being who isn't perfect but is still true to self. I enjoy your poem because who hasn't felt like this at one time or another. It is truthful in its emotion. Thank you for sharing your poem with us.

[R E Tree]

Your welcome and thank you for reading. It’s my first piece in a long while. I will continue writing and I’ll be sending a review back shortly. I’m glad you recognise that the poem is a positive take on being selfish. It’s highly unusual for a word with such a cruel meaning can still have the ability to be enlightening and inspiring.