The Moon Shines In The Sky

The Moon Shines In The Sky

A Poem by light and ashes

The moon shines in the sky like a huge round diamond, above a world that I sometimes see as just a s**t storm.
I've been tracing my thoughts that sometimes feel like trash.... like graffiti spray painted on walls and under highway bridges.. like thrown away art.
Running on this highway called life.
I feel like second hand clothes, but I am an original just the same.
My life feels like a worn out paper bag.
There are shards of glass in my veins.

© 2023 light and ashes


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I really like the freedom with which you attack each line. The language is modern, lyrical, as if you are having a conversation and that is a good thing, indeed.
Winston

Posted 2 Years Ago


light and ashes

2 Years Ago

I think I might have been having a conversation in my head...with myself.
I just wrote it dow.. read more
dearest light and ashes... our World seems to be in decline in Leadership Areas; and we mourn for the Progress that we have so heavily paid to protect our Freedoms of our own Country and other Countries as well. We constantly pray for a Miracle and better days. tenderly, Pat

Posted 2 Years Ago


light and ashes

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much. I always appreciate your kindness, Patricia.
I live in a small mountain city, and there is this random mile long tunnel that goes under the city, that many people don't know about. It doesn't seem like it belongs at all, dark and foreboding... I like to go under there from time to time to look at the graffiti that is scattered throughout it; someone is actively changing the artwork...honestly it is better than the small art gallery our university maintains. So perhaps in the right setting, to the right people, even graffiti has merit?

My advice for this poem is to look at deliberately structuring it, to add line breaks that help it flow more deliberately. Poetry becomes fun when you start evaluating how to use silence, how to group words, how you want the words to flow down the page. Your metaphors are on point, and I quite like this.

Posted 2 Years Ago


light and ashes

2 Years Ago

How cool! Thank you for sharing.
:)
Lines five and six absolutely stood out to me.
"an original just the same"
yes you are, light....and your poetry is original....you are a voice on WC...
always look forward to reading your new pieces.
j.

Posted 2 Years Ago


light and ashes

2 Years Ago

I love your work as well...I was reading one of your works earlier. I always love reading your kind .. read more

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Added on August 12, 2022
Last Updated on June 17, 2023


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