The Infinity of Us

Our conversations were full of pregnant pauses that ended up being still borns.
A silent longing passed between us.
A longing for words to fill the void, but there were none.
All our memories we spilled into the sea, to fade into nothingness.
The infinity of us passed into the next cycle of life to be reborn somewhere else.

Reviews

[Yellow Butterfly]

Stunning piece...you could feel the emotions from start to finish...

Beautiful

YB

[light and ashes]

Thank you so much.

[Jerome F Knox III pseud..]

This was a great poem to read. The opening lines are brilliantly penned. You captivated me all the way to a perfect ending that supported the opening stanzas. Well Done!

[light and ashes]

Thank you! I'm so glad you enjoyed it!

[Arundass TP]

Beautiful poem presenting a philosophy of life. Good work

[light and ashes]

Thank you.

[Franky]

Oh I like this. It's sad, true. But I know people like this. Some are so hard to talk too. And others just piss us off or hurt us so that we can't even begin to start. How akward. Well said!

[light and ashes]

Sometimes it happens.... thank you for your review.

[syndi]

i like the way you personified the emptiness of the relationship, i think it's really powerful. the first line was built with such a distinctive metaphor. i have never heard anything like it before, it was so effective! no critiques :)

[light and ashes]

Thank you!

[Gee]

So many couples sit across a table with neither looks or words shared, with seemingly no common ground to converse about it must be a strange way to conduct a relationship and surely only ends one way.
I'm 29 years with my wife this year and we still chat away to each other, only now she tells me what to say :)))
Good morning

[light and ashes]

That's cool :) thanks for your review.

[Viktoria]

Your title holds a great irony; especially in regards to love and relationships. They quite often fall into the abyss of those pregnant pauses and find themselves reincarnated, but only with another. It's a clever idea, well expressed with a lovely slight touch of buddhist theology. 🌹

[light and ashes]

Irony is what I was going for with this..... you are the first one to comment on that part of the piece.

[Ghost writer]

Wow, that first line is so so meaningful. I would have never thought to put it that way, heartbreaking. The whole thing holds power.

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This is sheer poetry... Nothing to say more... Love this write so much...

[Nix is typing...]

Oh, my goodness...
There was so much emotion conveyed in so few words. It really hit me.
I liked this read, it was so...deep.

100/100

Nix ❤️

[light and ashes]

Thank you so much, Nix! :)

[Nix is typing...]

You're so very welcome! :)))