The Open Jaw of a Corpse

The Open Jaw of a Corpse

A Poem by light and ashes
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He is rotten.

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His jaw lies open like a corpse,
the way that lies fall out of it.
His tongue is sour and rotting.
He forms words, but they are worthless,
because they have no substance.

He is a shell of skin and bones.
His words are as hollow as his soul.
He knows no good.
Only evil.

He is a robber of the poor and defenseless.
He is the foulest among all things.

He is a used Car Salesman, a Con-man, and a Snake Charmer all in one.

When he speaks he causes the flowers to wilt.


© 2022 light and ashes


Author's Note

light and ashes
This is about no one in particuliar. Just good old Halloween/October fun. Influenced by the Bible and other influences.

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You create a scary character. Must be tricky to be a car salesman, con-man or snake charmer. Nice use of description. I wanted to know more. Thank you dear friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

Posted 1 Year Ago




are you sure this i about no one in particular .. I kinda got the feeling he might be botherin you L&A .. if he is just give us a shout and I'll send over a hit man or two .. scared the pants off me so ya did :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


light and ashes

1 Year Ago

I am sure I wrote this inadvertently about a few people, Neville, but not intentionally.
I love this. The pure wickedness and form of the corpse and the way it’s written is just great. This is an amazing Halloween poem, and it doesn’t just feel like a silly, goofy piece necessarily, of course. Your poems always seem to hold such a weight that works so well in each of them. I love the way this is written, thank you for sharing.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Love it. I'm a huge Halloween fan and anything foul and grotesque makes me grin. Rotting corpses and the spirit of fall and crunchy leaves. Great job.

Posted 2 Years Ago


light and ashes

2 Years Ago

Thank you!!!! So glad you enjoyed it.
Well. even though this was about no one in particular tour words have a fiery edge that is remarkable

Posted 2 Years Ago


light and ashes

2 Years Ago

Lol thank you :)
I see this as not only a good Halloween tale but a summary of self-doubt or bad thoughts that continue to manifest in our subconscience.

Nicely done. :)

Posted 2 Years Ago


I don't want to find myself sitting next to him when I visit my local pub :) Bad company. Very Halloweeny, but such a descriptive piece of reading and well executed.

Chris

Posted 2 Years Ago


light and ashes

2 Years Ago

Thank you!
Somehow, used car salesmen have come to occupy the ground between Hitler and Judas Iscariot. For some reason, no one likes them. The only step down is politicians.

Posted 2 Years Ago


light and ashes

1 Year Ago

True, quite a funny observation.
Even if this isn't about anyone in particular, the poem is cathartic because everyone has someone like this they can imagine. Everyone has a man in their mind whose heart they would eat in the market-place, to paraphrase Shakespeare, and be happier for it. Your strongest line in my opinion is your titular one, of lies falling out a corpse's mouth, but the whole thing as a unit flows so well.

If you haven't, I would suggest reading this out loud. It feels like it could be delivered as an angry monologue just as well as it can be read as a poem. Brilliant.

Posted 2 Years Ago


I like your closing line best. What a vivid picture it paints

Winston

Posted 2 Years Ago



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