Mother's of Addiction

Mother's of Addiction

Mom i saw your face
when first you gazed at me
I'm sure when you look now
that is still what you see

Your lullabyes have turned into
advice that i did'nt take
Life has led me down so many roads
with habits that i just can't shake

Everyday is but a moment
of the child you think you had
Addiction has adopted me
It's become my mom and dad

You will weep a mournful lullabye
because your child you cannot save
Just as you laid me in my cradle
You will lay me in my grave

Angelea Paugh

3-16-16

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A very sad lullabye written, break the parent heart when cannot save their child.
"You will weep a mournful lullabye
because your child you cannot save
Just as you laid me in my cradle
You will lay me in my grave"
The above lines is true. Loss of child leave barren place forever. Thank you Angela for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Kathy Van Kurin]

angelapaugh,
"Mother's of Addiction"
I wonder if there is much thought in the heart of someone living a disfunctional existance about others? Drug use, alcohol and the social outlets involved along with theft..etc.
Such a dead end life style. The mama and papa? Are they part of the loss involved. Mostly I believe they pay the highest cost in pain: tears, prayers.

[Legion]

Those last two lines are a slap in the face of reality. I shuddered when I read them. That seldom happens (even with my own writing). Well done.

[angeleapaugh]

Thank you so much

[Manu]

Wow....this one is an awesome poem...truly a heart rending piece. All the stanzas are beautifully written but these last four lines touched me deep:
You will weep a mournful lullabye
because your child you cannot save
Just as you laid me in my cradle
You will lay me in my grave
A sad tale of an addict expressing his emotions to his mother ! A very truthful and powerful piece of writing with a sad ending.
Keep up the good work.

[Michael S]

Very beautiful poem. This one is an emotional and heart breaking piece. Keep it up.

[angeleapaugh]

Thank you so much.

[FIN]

Just, wow. I know addiction all too well within friends and family and this nails the destruction it has upon relationships and how it wreaks havoc on their lives (and those whom surround them) whilst they're stuck in the cycles of on and of highs.

Each stanza is lain out well and progresses the story-line in a smooth fashion as well as tells another chunk of the story about from an addict's perspective.

This was written softly, I feel, to stay with the feel of a lullaby. Which was captured gracefully at the end with those two last lines, juxstaposing one another screaming: "life" and "death"

The whole poem is powerful; but the third and fourth stanzas really hit home with the addiction.

Nicely written on such a terrible topic.

Much love,

LR

[Bala Gorthi]

Heart touching ! A painful reality with addicts you have brought out very well in this very well scripted write.
Keep sharing.

[D Connolly]

Damn, so heart-wrenching. My parents have told me of the evenings they couldn't sleep, wondering if I would be dead by morning. This is a great poem

[Ashwin Shanker]

"Addiction has adopted me
It's become my mom and dad"

I loved this line.

"Just as you laid me in my cradle
You will lay me in my grave"

This is far too powerful, like, a punch in the gut type of powerful. Keep in mind that "I" is always written in capital letters, please change that.

Also for the title of poem, you can just name it "mothers of addiction" though I feel the title is a bit misplaced, it was catchy and click-baitish, so it works

[angeleapaugh]

Thank you! I will remember that.

[Lovecraft]

Good rhymes and good poem overall. I can relate to this quite well, unfortunately. For me, this really hits home. Pretty damn good in a tragic sort of way.

[angeleapaugh]

Thank you. Yes this hits home for a lot of people.