What It Feels To Kiss You

I wrote this during Valentines. A thought occurred as I lay in my bed in the morning.

What it would be like if you were to kiss me?

Would it be like the warmth of Spring?

And caressing as a gentle breeze?

Or would it be like the wintry magic of Winter?

And hold me close in slumber?

Would it be sweet as day?

Or dark as night?

Would it be unending as time?

Or lingering, like us?

The wonder of your kiss eludes me,

For I have longed for the magic it held.

But kiss me now,

I beg thee.

For I cannot bear the wait. 

Author's Note

Any suggestions for improvement?

Reviews

[Layla J Omorose]

Such a romantic poem and so suitable for Valentine's Day. I really enjoyed the contrast between Night and Day, seems to convey passions roughness and a lovers tenderness. I especially like the second stanza with the contrast between Spring and Winter. With that being said I agree with previous reviews about the wording. Just a simple change in worlds would complete the poem. I like it. Well done.

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

This is good. I would change some of the wording.....and hold "me" close in slumber.
I have longed "for" the magic it held
and bare to "bear".. An awesome romantic piece........

[Brie]

Great poem! I especially like the line "Would it be unending as time? Or lingering, like us?" It speaks a thousand words in it's simplicity. I also like the contrast between Spring and Winter

Some observations: Did you mean the first line to be "What WOULD it be like.."?
The 4th line seems redundant with "the wintry magic of Winter" - try using a different adjective.
The last stanza, "For I have longed the magic...", should there be a "for" in between "longed" and "the"?

Loved it!