Revival

The soul reincarnates on reunion with the loved ones..... To a friend

Lips curled up into a smile

This face radiant about a hundred suns,

Dampened are these gleamy eyes

by the sweet and savoury ones (memories),

This soul sheds the scales of sorrow and the hope revives,

When the soul of yours strikes mine,

Warmth lies in that embrace, immortal love in the sea of those swapping kisses, we dive

Let the earth be still for my heart hasnt quenched the thirst of lonliness from the past times.....

Author's Note

Do review this plzz

Reviews

[Christoph]

I want to critique this for you in a useful way, but I can't find much to complain about here. It's a really striking poem for me and the kind of thing I really appreciate, because I don't relate to it very well and you're able to show me something here that I wouldn't have within myself.

The only thing I can say about it is that I have trouble finding the rhythm in the second stanza, which I look for because the first hit so steadily.

[aneeqa]

Thank you for de genuine review.....it plays an important part in my growth and learning.... I will edit it to make it better. :)

[Jelani]

I enjoy positive poetry :) your expression of love is unique
Good job!

[aneeqa]

Thank you jelani, I have written this for my best friend...... we rarely meet because she lives in another city ..... thnk u for de review

[sonnie ibadah]

this is so beautiful...i like it!

[aneeqa]

Thank u sonnie :)

[jane7z]

Amazing writing I love how in a short piece you create so much imagery

[aneeqa]

Thank you for de review :)