There's A Girl That I Cannot Forget

Typical nonsensical melodramatic sentimental lunacy.....

To write this nonsense, I must be insane

But my Love for you,

Burns inside and will remain

The driving force behind these words,

Laced with Pain

I want you so badly,

Other girls get mad at me

While my friends continue to laugh at me

Without You,

I cannot live this life happily

I don’t think I’d need the weed

If you were to be with me

The last is pure crap

I smoke the herb because I am mad

At a World that makes me so sad

It’s been almost a year since

His Death and I miss my Dad

But not as much as I miss you

And that, My Love, is the Honest Truth

He’d understand because he loved you, too

But what he wanted will never happen

That is why I am stuck here,  Rappin’

Instead of being caught in Love’s Sweet Action

 

There’s a Girl that I Cannot Forget

She’s Cancerous as She Blows

The Smoke from her Cigarette

She Doesn’t Understand

That She is Mine Yet

But that’s Okay, because

I Love that Stupid B***h

 

She’s Mine and Will Be Forever

Or At Least until These Words

Are No Longer Clever

And By That Time,

It Won’t Even Matter,

Because I am Nothing in This Life

Without Her

 

Andrew N. Farrens

July 29, 2008

Benicia, Ca

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Ees]

I like it.
I like when you say that you love the stupid b***h. Don't we all feel that way a bit about those that we love, I've been known to say, "he's such an a*****e. I love him" in the same breath. Sometimes when I call somebody a dick, love, is exactly what I mean.

I liked this better as I kept reading. At the top I wished for some more unusual words to throw it off. Don't get me wrong, I like simple and easy to understand, but sometimes you just need a bit more variety or it starts to sound like something that anybody could say and it doesn't hold onto the writer's own identity as well.

The second stanza was a thing of absolutely pure beauty. The others could use a once over again, there are some glitches in the flow. Overall great job!

[Caradoc]

I see a lot of myself in this piece. Although, interestingly, as I ponder my own reality and the events I can compare to what you write about in this poem, the ache is dull. I'm guessing the hemorrhaging in my heart has stopped and begun to clot.

Either way, well written. You packed a lot of emotion into this one. Thank you for sharing.

-Caradoc

[Anamika]

love is stupid and it is blind.. it makes us silly a joke of a kind.. i loved this poem because i fall under this category

[Andrew N. Farrens]

thank-you.....

[Kristin Lee]

Very clever. I like the general rhythm and tenor of it.

[MoriartyMesa]

First off, any smoker wroth his pipe will tell you your smokin for the wrong reason. Unless your the sort of mutant like me.

[Barbara Walker]

Love this Andrew! honest real emotion without the sentimental boo hoo. Like the structure, love the syntax. Great write!

[gombeggar]

this is a good rant...that's wut I call them...outpouring and all...it can be cleansing for a writer

[dw817]

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This is - unusual, some of it rhymes and some doesn't, or I'm losing the meter to it.
Also, I don't know if you're aware, you capitalized over 50% of the words in here, if it's for effect, I can see - if not, well there ya go.

As for the story itself, it sounds a little like some women I've seen in the bar when I'm with Chris. Dangerous women. You think you want to be with them but deep inside you know they would chew you up and spit you out.

[Andrew N. Farrens]

Although she still lives, the woman I wrote this about no longer exists......
ANF

[Baby Ricochet]

Two words "Rebound p***y." It'll fix everything. Well probably not but it will get your mind off of the other chick and why you're a pothead

[Sami Khalil]

"my Love for you,

Burns inside and will remain

The driving force behind these words,

Laced with Pain

I want you so badly,

Other girls get mad at me

While my friends continue to laugh at me

Without You,

I cannot live this life happily"
That is called some good poetry. A very well written one...:)