I thought we were together; that was my worst mistake ever!

I wrote this poem on a rainy fall-like day. There's no true story behind it, though this is really a common situation in nowadays relationships.

I thought we were together;

that was my worst mistake ever!

You said we’d lighten the weather,

but this was the best lie ever.

 

How could you just make fun of me,

when all I wanted was a bride-to-be?

How could you just cheat this way,

when ‘yes’ was all that I used to say?

 

True love does never come to an end,

but now we aren’t even friends.

You said you didn’t mean to offend,

I’m sorry honey, but I can’t comprehend.

 

I thought we were together;

that was my worst mistake ever!

You said we’d lighten the weather,

but this was the best lie ever.

Reviews

[Pencrafter]

Your poem flows with the clear water of emotional thoughts. Very pleasing rhymes and balance. The only thing I might add is a last verse with a positive note. Or not. It certainly conveys the situation we sometimes encounter in failed relationships.

[andreii93]

Thanks :) Yeah a last verse with a positive note would be also good :)

[~]

They say a lot of things when it comes to an end but whether or not they are true is another matter. Nice work on this, Andrea. A very emotional write.

[andreii93]

Thank you so much :)

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

Wow, you're right this is a situation in relationships that happen quite a lot! It's funny how people say that "true love" doesn't ever end, but yet the person you felt those sparks with isn't even one of your friends.It sucks, because I can honestly relate to this piece. There are so many lies that go on during and out of relationships. I like the first and last stanzas are the same ones, it makes it good to me! Great job! :D

Ashley Rivers--Dream BIG and you'll win BIG:)

[andreii93]

Thank you so much for your review :) Yeah, unfortunately this situation happens too much...

[Call_Me_Miss_Imperfect]

You're very welcome:), and yeah it does! :/

[BIIKAY]

awwww I hope you never have to live something like this :) great write!!

[andreii93]

Haha I think we all hope not to live such a terrible experience :)

[MOON]

Poignant lyrical write, heartbreakers!

[andreii93]

Thanks :)

[Neva Flores Smith - Cha..]

fabulous rhythm and rhyme.........well done Andreii :)

[andreii93]

Thanks :)

[Mia]

Nice one :) it flows well! Thanks for sharing

[andreii93]

Thanks for your review :)