Better never means better for everyone

I wrote this midway through watching the Handmaid's Tale; considering the parallels, and the possibilities, and the truths already inherent. It's not total fiction at all, is it?

Like humanity became a filthy word

The dark became brightness

Sorrow and loss,

                        everyday

The joy no longer to be coveted

I sit, here, alone in the bleakness

With only my memories

         And they're the sun cracking light

             The warmth on dampened skin

                The camaraderie of lifelong friends

Those familiar tendrils, that caress no more

      Solitude a gift

           An escape from a real reality.

You

You are inverted. Perverted

Timid, compliant. Complicit.

Freemen in freeworlds. Brainwashed. Owned. Privileged.

Benefitting knowingly

From the losses of others...

Surety. Dogma. Piety.

Mine. Yours. Everyone's.

We live the purest sin.

And our only penance is to feel pain.

And our only redemption is to feel anything.

Reviews

[redalia]

the last 3 stanzas gave me chills. you should have a lot more readers

[ashkat]

I'm not great at interacting to be fair. I'm also a very shy writer... always assume everything is a bit crap. So your encouragement and kind words are highly appreciated!

Any tips on increasing readership would be much appreciated. though the obvious answer is read/comment more on other people's work...

[redalia]

i think you have every right to be confident but i understand your shyness. writing is a very personal thing too.
yeah, you already know how to increase readership! maybe you could share the link to your work on your social media account/s as well, if you use social media and are comfortable with people there to know you share your work here, of course.