longing & waiting !!!!

my waiting for train became a poem

Longing & Waiting
at railway station so long;

Waking up in the midest of winter breeze;
Covering up in the freezer of temperature;

Still
Longing & waiting;

Refreshing sleep
with sip of tea;
Refreshing eyes with marathon of people around;

But i guess i have to wait more;
Bcz my train is late more;

What to say more;
Longing & Waiting
at railway station so long!!!-anant

Reviews

[bsheph06]

Great Poem
I would have to say that I have had so many of those days when I have had to wait for a train.
When I was going to University at Wollongong, I had to wait up to an hour and a half for the train everyday (It was a killer.) I like how you finished the poem by a repetition of the first two lines, it helped to reinforce your longing for the train to come.

[anant mody]

thankss aa lottt

ur wordss really makes me feel i hav written a killer.piecee

thanks for.appriiciation:-):-):-)

[Lizardo]

I like how you describe what's happening in that moment
Really good poem, Keep up the good work!

[anant mody]

thanksss for yr appriciation:-):-)