mamá

I could say a thousand things about someone as central to my life as my mom.

Senryus about my
favorite - my one and
only - mom (so far).

"Mom!, I understand!!"
5 minutes later - wait, what did
she want me to do?

Eating my breakfast
cereal, “Mom!, let’s go to the
lake!,” Mom says, “Can’t.”

“I can’t wait to be
a lifeless professional,”
I say to my bowl.

Mini-heart attack:
Your mom says: "OK, I need to
ask you a question."

Author's Note

all comments welcome

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Another example of your already extensive repertoire in poetry which not only is a tribute to your relationship with your mother but a humor filled look at growing up. Stanza three, line might benefit from the final 'the' moving down to the final line to give the correct count and line two of the final stanza has eight on (syllables)?

[anais.vionet]

Thank you =]
I try and check my syllables. I use both syllablecounter and countwordsworth although they don't always agree.
I like the Senryu form because I think it's structure helps me focus my thoughts - but it can be limiting as well in the syllable counting - which I'm not above violating =] After all, the form was developed for the Japanese language.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Indeed in the west we use syllable count instead of on, thus we differ, but it is what it is. I think senryu, Haiku, tanka and other Japanese forms do help in getting things said in a pithy form. And that helps with longer form works. Your work is already of a high quality so in time you have the potential to be a top writer.

[anais.vionet]

Awww, thank you so much!