A Running Pen

Words don't always come out easily as we please..

They are only born at times when our feelings overcome every language ever known.. 

I get those times a lot.. 

One of those times..one of the most important..is when I think of you..

I feel safe..loved..important..

My pen starts running on the paper.. 

Trying to catch my emotions and every word I want to tell you..

But with no avail..

For I can't get my love to you out of my heart a second to put it on a piece of paper.

Reviews

[Alira]

Hey Amal, there's something cool going on in this poem that I don't think you see quite yet ... I love the idea of words being born and pens skating over paper. There's potential in this to be turned into an Ars Poetica. What I'd recommend is cutting the we/I/you and sticking with this in third person. You can get the idea of telling someone you love them without explicitly saying so (since it's in writing) across by cutting the last two lines. Cutting the we/I/you parts will also eliminate a lot of the abstractions in this. And insert more line breaks, too; it creates a better flow.

"Words are born at times when
feelings overcome the language of..."
and so on.

Good luck!

~R

[Amal N]

Thank you very much for the helpful review :)

[Saddam]

Trying to catch my emotions and every word I
want to tell you..
But with no avail..
For I can't get my love to you out of my heart a
second to put it on a piece of paper.

It is just as I Always write. Very certain and very heart touching. I just want to say it, gajab......

One of those times..one of the most
important..is when I think of you...
My pen starts running on the paper..

[Amal N]

Thank you very much :)