Hopelessness

No hope. No fear.

 

 

I built a palace in my dreams

I gave it all I had

The dream ended; I was washed ashore

My palace was built on sand

 

Then I climbed atop a lofty mountain

For sometime that was home to me

On a stormy night, I was swept off my dwelling

The walls were made of snow, you see

 

Now I find safety in loneliness

I have killed my hopes, my dreams

With no corner to call my own

Why would I fear losing anything?

Author's Note

I wrote it more than a year back. The third stanza was very depressing so I re-wrote it today to make it less-depressing.

I know this will still sound :-( to some of you...most of you...

Reviews

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is a very practical piece of writing.
Yet, I agree that the third stanza concluded the entire feel very well. But still, I found it very optimistic.
Sometimes, it is right to kill our dreams and our hopes to live in a world of reality. and I guess that's the thing which makes life different from dreams, since only in our dreams we can get everything and whenever we starts living our life like a dream, we only falls into the thorns of those unfulfilled dreams to know that this is the real life.
The poem is very well versed but....I would love to read the original one too :)

[coldust]

good write up, i wud love 2 read the rest of your stuff!!!
overall very simple, sad yet powerful poetry....
though i wud luv to read the unedited 3rd stnza, i really do.

[poetic soul]

ya it does sound :(..........but its also a very known feeling so its gr8 to read.. i really liked this poem and yo description was also very true... no hope..no fear.. also loved the last two line... its like the harsh truth you need to embrace!

Regards,
Poetic Soul

[Tony Hwilka]

A good write it remimded of the saying a man who has nothing; has nothing to lose. Keep writing.

Tony

[angelina neves]

it is sad and also beautiful... and i do belive we real have "nothing" of ours - just dreams and illusions that we gather "things" we call "ours"! - so "Why would I fear losing anything?"!! :)

[JadedSparrow]

"The third stanza was very depressing so I re-wrote it today to make it less-depressing."

You need not worry about that. I thought the piece was beautifully tragic. More so because I can relate to it right now. I enjoyed it very much. Good write.

JS

[Kevin Andros]

Well, er, it's more the hard reality of this life, the more you hope, the more you expect, the more you end up getting disappointed, heartbroken and all the sad stuff that there is. There's a very famos saying, "Expectations leads to disappointments."

So, when you stop hoping, stop trusting, stop believing and stop expecting, automatically, you kill your fear. The fear of disapointments, heartaches, etc.

Nice write. I would say a Knowledgeable write. And you are the master of saying a lot of things in very few words. Great work. ~KA~

[LadyLove]

We all have times we want to express how we feel at certain moments in life. They are a part of who we are becoming as we go along and grow with each lesson learned. What you have learned should serve to make you a wiser and more sure person. Walk your road to finding the good there is ahead of you. Don't kill hope. Don't fear losing...it hurts..but it shows you your strength and fortitude that you can spring back and be all the more stronger for it. You are woman....ROAR!!!!

[Dr. S. D. Blankenship D..]

Very nice, I LOVE IT! you have quite away with words my friend. quite away indeed. I really enjoyed reading this as you can tell. I dont think it was sad just "Life" you must aways let go of yourr emotions in order to live and I love the way you have wrote this.

S.D.Blankenship the GOTHICCOWBOY