Completely Broken

Acrostic

 

Can I ever go back to being what I was?

Or become who you wished me to become?

My heart knows you still want the best for me

Probably that is not to be

Losing you has destroyed my wishes

Every where around is darkness

The hole I’ve buried myself in, is very deep

Emptiness surrounds me, the climb is too steep

Life has come to a standstill

Your memory is all that feels alive

 

Battling against feelings of self-destruction

Rarely do I think of picking myself up again

Overwhelming emotions have cluttered my mind, I

Know that I still exist, but I’m aware I’ve ceased to live

Every dream that you dreamed for me is broken

Now I’m broken as well; completely broken

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Kevin Andros]

Is this a common trend? Following up the title of the poem in the first letters of the lines? Bhavya does that extremely well, I see that He got this from you.

Can I ever go back to being what I was?

The first line gives an impression that the writer wants to go back to the innocent days, when his/her soul was pure, but

Or become who you wished me to become?

This line changes the whole vision of the reader as the writer talking about the time before the relationship and now is over and there's nothing left but the scars and "Yadein" of that relationship.

Throughout the poem a flow has been maintained and like I said earlier, the title repeating itself vertically was simply a work of art. Well done. ~KA~

[Dezaraye]

This is a great acrostic. I enjoyed the way your words flow so eloquently down the page. The story is a sad one, but beautiful nonetheless.

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Very clever and wonderfully woven words and phrases in poetic form. A lovely acrostic which was a joy to read. Thank you for sharing

[Bhavya Kaushik]

Beautiful usage of language and great Acrostic.
Well, like any of your writing this one is full of emotions and complex feeling. Very painful, but that's what life is all about...Sometimes we need to get broken as to revive again with the same strength to face this world...
"Emptiness surrounds me, the climb is too steep"- This line really out stands the entire piece...
So depressing and I felt quite sad after reading it :'(
great work :)


"Relationships are like glass. Sometimes it's better to leave them broken than try to hurt yourself putting it back together."

[The Poor Man's Poet]

This is a pretty good for a poem of longing and depression.
and I think the pic is perfect for this poem.j
This is a good write. I like it.

The hole I've buried myself in is very deep
Emptiness surrounds me, the climb is too steep

[Poeticpiers]

As fine a depiction of loss as I have ever read.That it is in acrostic form was not immediately apparent The words held my attention