Broken Trust

True.

 

 

I wanted to be

Someone "you" could trust for life.

Now that you’re gone,

I’m finding it so very

Hard to trust myself with me.

 

Author's Note

Trying a Tanka

Reviews

[Jofer Serapio]

Wonderful tanka, Caffeine. The sincerity of your words and the way they complement each other pretty much speaks for themselves. The emotion is very powerful and its presence was well felt. It was a nice look into your heart. We all feel pain, that's the truth, and that's what makes us human. The good thing is that after a few days, after a few beers (in my case), everything works itself out and I no longer feel that bad like the first time I felt pain. Sure, it still lingers inside of me, it still burns when i think about it, but the mere fact that I'm walking again makes it all worthwhile. I find solace whenever I stand back up after a tremendous blow. For some strange reason, I like pain for what it makes me realize: I am human. After everything, I am still human.

[larryb]

Well done and to the point i liked this a lot ....Kudos

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

I don't think I've ever seen or heard of a Tanka until now....this very deep and intense, emotional piece.

Great Write.

[Bhavya Kaushik]

I don't know anything about you Caffeine, but I'm sure about one thing that there is an extreme and intense pain in your heart and I really admire your super talent to convey and to write your emotions with such an extreme flow and power which is so inimitable....
This is again so beautiful and so sad indeed! Awesome write..I loved it!! :) :)



"It takes a minute to find a special person, An hour to appreciate them, A day to love them....
But an entire lifetime to forget them!" :)

[Valentine]

I know nothing about Tanka..but the thought behind the words is so deep one can feel the pain and longing for a chance to try again..I loved this one..God bless..Valentine

[Nicole Renee]

This was a very emotional tanka; very touching! I don't know what to say, but I hope everything will be better in the future.

-Nicole

[Carole]

So few words and yet packs a powerful punch! Very well done, girl!

[Serendipity]

Oh girl, you're gonna make me cry. How can someone have so much pain? I wish there were words I could say to help you heal. But no words from me will ever be of any use.