Broken Trust

True.

 

 

I wanted to be

Someone "you" could trust for life.

Now that you’re gone,

I’m finding it so very

Hard to trust myself with me.

 

Author's Note

Trying a Tanka

Reviews

[Jofer Serapio]

Wonderful tanka, Caffeine. The sincerity of your words and the way they complement each other pretty much speaks for themselves. The emotion is very powerful and its presence was well felt. It was a nice look into your heart. We all feel pain, that's the truth, and that's what makes us human. The good thing is that after a few days, after a few beers (in my case), everything works itself out and I no longer feel that bad like the first time I felt pain. Sure, it still lingers inside of me, it still burns when i think about it, but the mere fact that I'm walking again makes it all worthwhile. I find solace whenever I stand back up after a tremendous blow. For some strange reason, I like pain for what it makes me realize: I am human. After everything, I am still human.

[Brandon]

That was great. I dig the simplicity! It causes one to read, and then re-read your words.

[Tony Hwilka]

BEAUTIFUL, expressly the last line. Hard to trust myself with me. Good work. Tony

[Kevin Andros]

I don't know what's a Tanka nor I know what was that syllable count was. But, This was a really thoughtful and witty write.

"Trust Myself with me"

A masterpeice by the master.

Simply too good to express that in words.

Keep writing. ~KA~

[Dug]

I don't much trust myself with me either.
Good poem.

[Adela Muresan]

Pain changes us � and this case the lose of the loved one, created a gap in the self � the loss of some abilities.

It's frank, and very realistic.

A.M.

[Jane Doe]

A great Tanka. I haven't experimented with this type of poem yet. You make it look so effortless. Great writing!

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Interesting form but I'm not sure of the meaning. Oh well, it IS early after all, I need MY caffeine, lol.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Well done, good poem. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Jenny Davis]

Aw, how very true. It seems when someone hurts us we second guess everything after...
Very nicely written in such few lines! :)