Undying fragrance

True :-(

 

Like the undeniable scent

Of a withered flower

Its petals crushed between pages

 Of a book long forgotten

 

Your love has lingered on devotedly  

Even after I trampled over it.

Now I know no way of loving you, so

I keep the fragrance safe in my heart.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Bhavya Kaushik]

This is such a beautiful and sad piece...painful indeed.

"Its petals crushed between pages
Of a book long forgotten."- I loved this metaphor a lot and it moved me!

(I wonder why our best work always comes from this feel of pain and distress, may be because this feel is much more stronger than any happiness or joy....)

"Now I know no way of loving you, so
I keep the fragrance safe in my heart."- Very intriguing lines and made me read them over and over again..As, the feel had been beautifully explained !

Brilliant work!

[black_rose_obsession]

I teared up while reading this. Beautiful!

[The Everyday Surprises ..]

It so sad and i can feel the pain but oh my god it's beautiful... i love it keep up the awesome work

[We are young.]

Fasinating, I really like it, keep up the work. Great poetic soul

[Brianna Brie]

What can I say? This is an amazing poem...poetically genius. It saddens me. Thanks for entering your poem into the Missing Him, Missing Her contest.

[Emily B]

This is a Lovely little poem.

[FuMiko]

Very strong and pretty, I really like this one, because you could pull many different meanings from it. And it is also quite beautiful, the imagery in it is exquisite.
You ought to be proud.

[Mysty Rayn]

Wonderful word choice in this piece. Really pulls at the heart.

[Partha]

This is overwhelmingly beautiful and imaginative, especially the first verse. I admire your ingenious thoughts. The poem is concise, says simply what it's meant to say and does have a lasting effect on heart. The words on the picture is also amazing. I liked the poem, a lot.

[.mate.feed.kill.repeat.]

My first instinct is to frown slightly and sigh "awww.... how beautiful," but I try not to give into those girly instincts. However, this was a very nice piece, especially its emotion. Most of all, the emotion helped this piece along. Starting it out with the graphic was also a nice touch.

The rhythm was nice and easy to follow. It was not overpowering, but it did really help this piece out and it made the lines and stanzas flow nicely together.

I would also like to comment on your word choice. I like the words you chose.
"Your love has lingered on devotedly / Even after I trampled over it." This line illustrates most vividly what I mean. You chose words like "devotedly" instead of a more boring synonym and "trampled," even when trampled sounds so harsh.

I really enjoyed this piece because it brought together several aspects of poetry that a lot of poets, including myself, fail to bring together.

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

Beautiful! Thank you for sharing, Debileah