I�m still looking for you

Still looking for you�even though I know that I�ll never find you.

 

Whenever love knocks

I pretend not to hear, for

In every man who

Holds my hand, I look for you;

You’re the one I wish to see.

 

Author's Note

Tanka: Syllable count 5-7-5-7-7

Does anyone know if the word �every� (line 3, here) is made of 2 syllables or 3?
I tried to check with syllable-counters available online. They gave me different results.

Reviews

[Dizzy-Izzy]

I read this aloud 3 times, okay 4. I see the syllable count form for the poem above, I realize line 3 is supposed to be 5 syllables, but it sounds better to me with the extra beat... as if e-ve- ry were 3 syllables. Just personal preference.

I was thinking about the theme in this one. Longing. Longing to see that 'one' face in every other face. It caused me to think back and wonder if I have a face like that in the back of my mind somewhere. The only one I want to see in every other.

(see K squint eyes and shake head... ) You know I am not sure. I have been in many... way... waaay too many relationships. Searching through all of them I am not sure about the face. The only one that has remained a constant in any of them is mine... only now it's a middle aged face... blah. (K now sticks out her tongue)

I wonder if the 'one' face will ever materialize or if I will have to accept that it is only me that I have been waiting for all this time...

[We are young.]

Very nice, poem I think every is three syllables but hey what do I know?

[Adela Muresan]

I can sure realate to this one...I think most of us can.

It's kowel that your poems don't have too many words for few ideas, but I think that you should try to put more speech flowers in the verses.

A.M.

[scorpion-red]

i enjoyed this piece

[Emily B]

careful what you wish for :-)

great poem

[Lyrical Love]

Excellent write!
Kudos!

[Brandon]

every has two syllables, but it has a weird texture when you say it. the ev(ery) part slurs your tongue. Anyway, nice poem. It is so hard when you want a relationship, but not with that person. Its like you want a double cheese burger, but you know its bad;)

[Natalie C]

Beautiful, simply amazingly beautiful.

It is strange how a person's mind works at times.
Being propositioned by so many suitors yet not wanting to give in knowing that there could only be one person special enough to share your hopes and dreams.

I know I said it before but I will have to again
Stunningly beautiful �

[Sarah]

Great job with this! I really admire any poem that can capture such beautiful, strong emotion in only a few lines. Lovely use of punctuation & language to make this work! The line "In every man who / Holds my hand, I look for you;" is my favorite, and captures the longing that we have to find that perfect someone in everyone, regardless of who they are! Great job again!!! :)

[Lau Thiam Kok]

This is simply great! "love knocks" - this is really 'making a sound'.

The most wonderful line are these two,

"In every man who
Holds my hand, I look for you;"

Thank you.