Invaluable

Jorio

 

 

 

 

 

I would give anything

To have you back

But you’re worth more

Than all I have.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Picture, courtesy photo.net gallery

Thanks to Nicholas Hallows for the suggestion.

 

Author's Note

A Jorio is a form of poetry comprising of four lines with four words in each line.

Reviews

[Rain]

What is this guy doing now ? Is he laughing and having fun, living his life ? I hurt for you, but you also have to know in your heart he's not the only one. You pieces are so powerful, but I challege you to write of another man who touches your heart. Rain..

[Adela Muresan]

Very good write.
I think that you should switch the color of the font, to black.

A.M.

[Brianna Brie]

Well this is definitely a great introduction to a Jorio. It is powerful and moving with such few words. Will have to try out this style of writing sometime. Thanks so much for entering it into the Missing Him, Missing Her contest.

[Laura E. Aranda]

I love a good jorio......can you tell me all about jorio(s)? Thanks! I LOVE Rain's review! Cheers,lea

[Mysty Rayn]

Wow! So powerful in so few words. This is so fantastic! Going into the favs!

[Creepy Swine Guy]

You pack an awful lot into a very few words. I think you did a wonderful job. You convery your hurt without your poem sounding like an angry child.

I do wonder how it would sound to you if the word "anything" were changed to "everything". Your thoughts?

[T]

Outstanding! Such great depth in a few words ... hugs

[Gandré]

Interesting attitude (value of the poem). I think to say such words to a partner, that is gone, is making him strong but........the person herself/himself is naked.......weakened......I think no one deserves such words like this, for people already made their decition....right..nicely done.

[Forest Green]

A true nugget of emotion.

Nicely done...

[poddar kushal]

so poignant and to the point..love penned down

[Kevin Andros]

You truly are the master of all forms of poetry! Hats off to you Caffeine!


Four lines saying so much!

Nice work.

~KA~