Femme Fatale

Her toxic presence

 

Poisoned his soul, and

 

Love died painfully.

Reviews

[C. Harter Amos]

A lot said with so few words. Very venomous. I read this as "her" meaning the woman in the relatinoship, being "toxic" and poisoning an innocent. Not a likely scenario, but maybe she believes it's so from blaming herself. I went back over it thinking the "her" could be another woman -- not necessarily another lover, but perhaps a mother or mother-in-law or even a friend. Pretty wicked depth of meaning for such a short piece.

[Shalini R]

i dont quite understand how that last line fit
i get more of a "lust" vibe from this piece
but youve got beautiful language here
great job

[Yvonne Heidt]

This is excellent. I loved the "toxic presence"

[rachel D]

good words. i love good words put together so well!

[Sean M. Addams]

very thought provoking ... love the last line... good job on this

[V. K. Harris]

Excellent write.

[Shane Patrick]

Romeo and Juliet?? good senryu my friend as always well done!!

[Jenny Davis]

Excellent senyru...there was passion, pain and insight in this...what a joy to read this! :)

[Captain Blackheart (The..]

A wonderful write!

[Brette Medb]

Beautiful, seductive, alluring.. great write!


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[Ladysue]

Wonderful Caffeine. Love died painfully; A great line. Loved it.