Refusing to move on

Has anyone saved it?

Reviews

[hyancynthstofeedthysoul]

I know where you are coming from. I had a marriage of over seventeen years. It produced six beautiful children. One day my oldest son and I came home to an empty house. We were devastated. everyone told me to find a new mate and move on. No way when I said ''Death do us part.'' I meant it. That was as long ago as we were together. Yet I remain chaste. Why? Because she ain't dead yet. I do not lie so I am bound by my oath. While not a follower of the ''book''. I accept the admonition “It is better not to vow at all than to vow and not fulfill” (Eccles. 5:4.

[Ivory]

So much pain in this piece.
Very honest and sincere are your words, I really connested with this poem.
Great write : )

[A.L. James]

The poem is very pogniant. The tragedy of the senseless waste of a life pining over a lost love, very sad. I would have liked to see the protagonist pick up the pieces of her life and start over again. Being hoplessly stuck in the past is unhealthy, lonely and completely unfair. The boyfriend will go on with his life and live happily ever after. The girl's revenge should be to know that he will someday regret what he lost, when she proves herself to him and everyone else that she is a person of worth and value, and completely in love with someone else. She would be the unreachable star, the thing the boyfriend regrets losing most. Literary work is fine, the structure matches the theme. I liked the red text it was kind of bleeding heart. You might rethink the subject with a sequel poem.

[Ladysue]

You spoke straight from the heart. I truly loved the way you wrote this.
I can feel the wanting for this person very strongly.
Great job.

[Rain]

This is really a perfect " love lost" poem. It's almost hard to read. You use very simple words, you don't try to confuse the work with multi meaning words. It's the order in which you put the words that give your writing, all writing, it's power.
I could almost bet this is a love left. There's always a feeling of incompleteness to such loves. I had one of those, almost five years of passionate love, that ended without being complete. When that happens, there's always a lingering feeling of "What if."
This write reflects that beautifully. Rain..