But I still love you

When you believe that the reason for the breakup is you, how do you carry on without your love�. This, unfortunately is true.

Very rarely does one come across

Someone as exceptional as you

I consider myself lucky that I did

I am grateful for the love you showered on me

For showing faith in me, like no one else

Slowly but steadily I moved closer to you

Shared my heart, enriched my soul

Trusted you with myself

I painted a very pretty picture

Of my future with you

Of our life together.

 

With your arms around me,

I got over the fears and the insecurities

That had been a part of me for so long

I was happy, I was eager

I was ready to start anew with you

I believed that I could overcome any obstacle

To make my dream come true

All along I was unaware that the biggest hurdle was me

I stumbled, I fell. And got up to a different self

I have lost you to my recklessness

I have stained your life

Sadly, I realized it too late

I have accepted my mistake

But I don’t ask to be forgiven

It’s too big a crime for that

So I have moved away

I hope you can move on

You haven't lost anything

For you are without something,

That wasn't worth having.

But I have lost happiness

The happiness that was made of you.

So, even though I cannot have you here by my side,

I still hold you close to my heart

The first thought on my mind is always Y-O-U

And I carry your memories everywhere I go

You are not with me today

But I will never be without you

 

 

Reviews

[Yvonne Heidt]

OMG - I totally have chills. (sorry - the valley girl slipped out!) This is beautifully written with honesty and (I believe) integrity. I FELT this.

I can relate to it all. The pain and loneliness are here without whining. Excellent job.

I LOVED this line:
"I stumbled, I fell. And got up to a different self"

[MorganLyn]

This is very sad :(
I feel the lonliness..not just through real life but in your poem as well..
very well written!

[Carrie Montgomery]

this is heart breaking and I can easily relate (as I am sure most of us can) .
"You are not with me today

But I will never be without you " so powerful.
"I have accepted my mistake

But I don't ask to be forgiven

It's too big a crime for that " the courage to admit what you did...such bravery and honesty.
Gosh ...you blew me away. Seriously. I have read this over and over again. Cannot get over it. It seems so real and as if you read my mind and said things that I wanted to and never could to the person I hurt. Bravo and congrats!! :-)

[Nicholas Hallows]

You have captured these feelings so well here. I could really feel your words.

All along I was unaware that the biggest hurdle was me
I stumbled, I fell. And got up to a different self

So painfully honest. Great writing. NH

[Prose-full]

i agree oooooooooommmmmmmgggg!!!!......this is absolutely amazing..if i didn't have 4,983,458,749 more poems to read you would be my 1st place..oh wait...4,983,458,750..poems to read..

ok, seriously..you have something amazing here.
do keep writing...
peace and ink
be well......
s.davis read your amazing poem today...and is inspired..

[~crazy Beautiful~]

I have been there, and this brought me back again. Such heartache and sorrow. And yet I stand here today in belief that everything happens for a reason. Hope you find happiness again. Nice work at expressing such deep emotion, it is always difficult to do.
My favorite lines
"Shared my heart, enriched my soul
Trusted you with myself
I painted a very pretty picture
Of my future with you
Of our life together. "

This stanza was what brought me back there.
Thank you for entering my contest

This writing is free style poetry and done well. It also falls into the category of narrative writing, where you take me through to another time. The emotions were felt from reading this... One of caution and then one of happy and joy, to the end.
I like the last two lines, summing it all up:

You are not with me today
But I will never be without you

The emotions within this writing is easily seen and felt..

[Frances O'Neill]

I think this is a really nice written work of prose. If there ever was a nice love story, then this would be one of them. Nice touch!

[Christopher 'Windstorm'..]

that is totally true and beautifully written this is what love is all about... i too still have a special someone i cannot get out of my head we were together for 8 years, we started young both of us were 8 years old and we grew together like a funeral pyre, then i got a dear john letter and that was the end of it. i could have done better but hindsight sucks! but she always penitrates my mind when i least expect it so i do understand. great read.

[Candle in the wind]

I hope it wins the contest it is exceptional.

[Laughing Lunatic]

Painful and yet so beautiful.So many favorite lines here "You are not with me today But I will never be without you" Wow! "I stumbled, I fell. And got up to a different self" you penned this so beautifully. Great write!