I think this poem is absolutely genius. i could realte to the poem. I felt how the character felt in the poem.
Shared my heart, enriched my soul
trusted myself with you
those lines fit me exactly I am always afraid to trust someone and to let someone in.
i loved this poem. thanks for sharing it. almost in tears.
Wow. This is one of the most vividly expressed heartbreaks I have read. My god, I just want to reach out and say... it's OK!! It'll be ok! Everyone is worth having... and we all make mistakes... some small, some huge.. some feel like "the end". I know you've probably heard this a million times and my saying it once more isn't going to shake the earth under your feet, but happiness is truly within. And i say that with the utmost confidence because it put my shattered, crushed, i don't want to eat, sleep, or live heart back together, once I discovered it. It's in you, if you look. That's the key. Okay, enough of my speech...
Your writing itself is excellent! Flow and style magnifcent and content.... felt!
This was such a heartbreakingly sad piece and yes, we felt it with you, the pain and the sadness of losing someone very dear to you. Yet your words remained soft without a hint of bitterness towards your lost love, almost like a final plea or maybe your way of starting to find a way to say goodbye one last time
I really loved;
You haven't lost anything
For you are without something,
That wasn't worth having.
I personally thought this was such a brilliant sentence.
Thanks for submitting I really enjoyed this
There is always life after love. It is completely apparent that if this person that you love was so willing to give you up...they were not worth the love you so freely gave to begin with. Love must be unanimous. It is the giving up of one's self ... one's selfish desires for the pure pleasure of bringing pleasure to the one you love. When it works you are truly not giving up anything because the one that loves you does the same so therefore your needs and wants and desires are always fulfilled by the other. Your cup never runs empty. If this love was unable to give that to you...you are better off.
Okay, the water is actually bubbling up in my eyes. Have you ever read a piece that basically reflected everything you ever thought of right back in your face? Well, that's exactly what your poem did for me. Envisioning a beautiful life with the woman of my dreams, only to throw it all away for one stupid, reckless night. That's a mistake I'll never be able to forgive myself for. My mother once told me that you know you truly love someone when you care more about their happiness than you do about your own. Well, every night I hold her close to my heart, and wish only that, wherever she is, she is far happier with her new man than she ever was with me.
Writing is easy. You only need to stare at a piece of blank paper until your forehead bleeds - Douglas Adams.
I am a woman in my 20's.
I love writing...sometimes it doesn't.. more..